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Review(s): 30
| Reviewer: MuggleForMagic | Date: 2007-09-19 |
| Reviewid: 149337 | Chapter: 1 |
| Omg That was sooo nice, sorta like Aladin, when he was like don't close your eyes and stuff that was so sweet. |
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| Reviewer: michelle | Date: 2004-06-09 |
| Reviewid: 86611 | Chapter: 1 |
hallo! ok, i ont criticize i just make a writer better ok?
i must congratlate you cuz you were brave enough t write and you though of a good plot. the thing is you didnt develop it correctly, it was all right, im not saying it was bad (on the contrary) but you couldve made it more uhm, detailed in some ways, for example what each other is thinking and not just sudden feelings because a reader doesnt feel the same way as the characters would, in that situation.
so thats the only thing you are missing ok? so keep up with the good ideas just, squeeze the juice they got, got it?
congratulations again, i did enjoy it and i hope you take this as constructive criticism (i think thats the correct spelling of that lol) |
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| Reviewer: !~*~ Parvati Thomas ~*~! | Date: 2004-04-16 |
| Reviewid: 79065 | Chapter: 1 |
| OMG THAT was like on of the BEST SHORT FICS I have like EVER read!! Great job !! |
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| Reviewer: Hex-grl | Date: 2003-12-19 |
| Reviewid: 64033 | Chapter: 1 |
| Absoluteley WONDERFUL! So breif but oh so sweet. It kinda makes you wanna write about romance, WHICH I say NO ONE should be embarresed to talk about or say, "Ewww!" when someone does. Romance naturly happens to everyone (almost) and its another way of life we should feel wonderful about romance its a very ' breif but sweet' part of our life. You should savor it and make it last as long as possible. |
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| Reviewer: islandgirl | Date: 2003-08-05 |
| Reviewid: 45482 | Chapter: 1 |
| in the 2nd book & movie ron and hermione would not evean hug and now they are kissing. that does not make sesnce but it was a good story. |
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| Reviewer: Hermione Weasly | Date: 2003-08-03 |
| Reviewid: 45220 | Chapter: 1 |
I just thought it was so romantic. You are a wonderful writer! Oh please, write
a sequal.( I don't think that was spelled right) |
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| Reviewer: H.G says thanx | Date: 2003-08-02 |
| Reviewid: 45114 | Chapter: 1 |
It was a wonderful story, I think it was good for ron since he doesn't
normally get attention! And that is a good boyfriend for hermione he sweet
and romantic.You are a wonderful writer please write more.(i agree with
cori it was really funny when pavarti and lavender were called twits ha ha!) |
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| Reviewer: me | Date: 2003-02-20 |
| Reviewid: 21211 | Chapter: 1 |
Cute story. I especially like the part where Malfoy calls Parvarti and Lavender twits, because they kinda are.
:-) |
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| Reviewer: Hannah | Date: 2003-02-08 |
| Reviewid: 19579 | Chapter: 1 |
" I only read a few lines and I can't read it! Please double space between paragraghs (I don't think I spelled that correctly) and indent the first word of the paragraph! "
It was a great story but you really should double space it.
Sequal in need! : ) |
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| Reviewer: Matthew | Date: 2003-01-02 |
| Reviewid: 14837 | Chapter: 1 |
| I only read a few lines and I can't read it! Please double space between paragraghs (I don't think I spelled that correctly) and indent the first word of the paragraph! |
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| Reviewer: Debora | Date: 2002-10-28 |
| Reviewid: 7356 | Chapter: 1 |
That was really sweet! Even though I don't think Ron would have the guts to say all he did to Hermione! ;)
And I don't know why, but I kept remembering Disney's Alladin (probably because it's my favorite Disney movie, so, I watched it millions of times) Did you write this inspired on it?
OH, and just one last thing: don't you think they should send Draco a "Thank you" note? ;) Just kidding! |
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