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Review(s): 55
| Reviewer: Reader 2 | Date: 2006-12-12 |
| Reviewid: 146432 | Chapter: 13 |
| You had a very good story going. My regrets for the mental incapacity that stopped you from finishing it. |
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| Reviewer: Madaline Fabray | Date: 2006-01-26 |
| Reviewid: 138894 | Chapter: 12 |
| Brrrr... that last bit was not quite expected. Wish it weren't so late, so I can read more -- this is addicting! |
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| Reviewer: Madaline Fabray | Date: 2006-01-25 |
| Reviewid: 138862 | Chapter: 10 |
Hmmm...why were red flags going up at Dumbledore's history to Tom? I have to wonder how much he left out. Then again, maybe I'm just paranoid.
I want to smack Draco. Hard. Multiple times. With a two-by-four.
On the other hand, I see hope for Tom in this chapter -- he actually apologizes. |
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| Reviewer: Madaline Fabray | Date: 2006-01-22 |
| Reviewid: 138779 | Chapter: 7 |
| Interesting observations from McGonagall, especially her memory about Tom Riddle always looking nieat and professional. Like when he first came to Hogwarts, TOm looks a bit more "casual," so I wonder how he will look at the end of this tale? |
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| Reviewer: Madaline Fabray | Date: 2006-01-21 |
| Reviewid: 138764 | Chapter: 4 |
| I love your Percy -- he is so believable. He would be the kind to stick around at the school, for the reasons you outline, but his family wouldn't understand. Putting Percy with Tom, I'm rather curious as to what will happen with that. I want to hit Draco. Hard. |
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| Reviewer: Madaline Fabray | Date: 2006-01-21 |
| Reviewid: 138762 | Chapter: 3 |
| Oh, very nice! Tom Riddle isn't just a clean slate. He may not remember the particulars, but he still has a lot of the same traits of his past self -- suspicion, arrogance and a hatred for being left out. You can see he is potentially trouble, whether he regains his memory or not. Excellent; most mind-wipe stories have the characters starting out with the mentality of babes, so this is a nice twist. And so far, Dumbledore hasn't made a good first (?) impression on Riddle. This is getting interesting! |
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| Reviewer: Madaline Fabray | Date: 2006-01-18 |
| Reviewid: 138689 | Chapter: 1 |
| A friend of mine recommended this, and even from the beginning chapter, I can see why. That was one heck of a beginning! |
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| Reviewer: my_dogstar | Date: 2005-03-09 |
| Reviewid: 115976 | Chapter: 9 |
| Kate Lynn, you continue to be my favorite for Tom Riddle fics. This is my favorite one, along with "Broken Victory". I can't seem to find the rest of this fic or Broken Victory, and it's driving me crazy! I love this fic, and you must continue, or else I will never read another Tom fic anywhere ever again;) |
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| Reviewer: Rae Leaver | Date: 2004-04-04 |
| Reviewid: 77238 | Chapter: 9 |
| I absolutely love this piece. I've seen quite a few stories where Riddle was sucessfully incarnated, but this one to me is the only one I have ever read that is both believable and enthralling. Your characterisation is immaculate, and I love the moments between Percy and Tom. The only thing I can think to comment on is the occaisional slip in conversational language- for example saying "candy", though this only happens occaisionally. This is truly a great read. |
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| Reviewer: Kate Lynn | Date: 2004-03-11 |
| Reviewid: 74106 | Chapter: 1 |
***Author Note on Fan Art***
GangsterSteph did this amazing fan art for this fic:
Tom, Percy and Lucius (Chapter 4):
http://www.deviantart.com/view/5555558/
Percy (Chapter 3 Portrait):
http://artwanted.com/imageview.cfm?id=53740
Copy, paste and enjoy. :) Any comments/remarks I can forward to her, including requests for her addy.
Kate |
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| Reviewer: Kate Lynn | Date: 2004-03-09 |
| Reviewid: 73819 | Chapter: 1 |
***Author Notes***
Who's speaking in the prologue? You'll find out in chapter 1. ;)
Everyone else, thanks for your remarks! I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Kate |
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| Reviewer: Amber | Date: 2004-03-09 |
| Reviewid: 73793 | Chapter: 9 |
I love this fic. It's such a brilliantly planned and characterized AU. I love how Tom Riddle's voice is kept in first person, sort of like the readers who are 'new' to this world. And the symbolism is brilliant, and... oh, it's just all great. Wonderfully touching and witty writing.
Amber |
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| Reviewer: Kate Lynn | Date: 2004-02-16 |
| Reviewid: 71044 | Chapter: 1 |
***AUthOR'S NOTE***
There are two more chapters of this fic up at FA and FF.net <You can email me or PM me if you want the links>. And another chapter is coming. However, I wasn't happy with this fic and am in the slow process of overhauling it. I really do appreciate all the encouragement, though, and hope to clean it up and finish it as quickly as school and work permit. 8-)
Thanks for all the reviews ans support!
Kate Lynn |
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| Reviewer: Danielle | Date: 2004-02-15 |
| Reviewid: 70870 | Chapter: 9 |
| Brilliant story! Your characters are very in-character. I can't think of any thing else to say, othet than please update soon! |
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| Reviewer: Dali | Date: 2004-01-04 |
| Reviewid: 65769 | Chapter: 1 |
Ack, sorry. I thought my first review didn't go through. Sorry for the double one! Though you prob deserve it, lol. ;)
Dali |
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| Reviewer: Dali | Date: 2004-01-04 |
| Reviewid: 65768 | Chapter: 9 |
Another brilliant chapter! Your characterizations are so spot-on i'm deliriously happy, lol. And the writing and plot are so wonderful and intruging I can't believe it. I just love your stories. I can't wait for more!
Dali |
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| Reviewer: Dali | Date: 2004-01-04 |
| Reviewid: 65767 | Chapter: 9 |
Brilliant! Your characterizations are so spot on I'm deliriously, canon-thumpin' happy, lol. And the writing and plot are so wonderful and intriguing. I just adore your stories. Please write more soon!
Dali |
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| Reviewer: the zedshuttlesponthief | Date: 2003-12-29 |
| Reviewid: 65062 | Chapter: 7 |
It took a moment to adjust to the really shocking concept of Tom Riddle's return to Hogwarts- sort of like the other ppl in the story. They have the same doubts and questions about him as me i guess, apart from Dumbledore who knew him at this age too: is he inherently evil? can they allow him to re-enact his future- would he choose a different way? How safe is it to allow him knowledge, what if he admires what he became? once he gains his memory back will he be exactly the same again..
Dumbledore's helplessness is frightening and sad. Trust is impossible to give, and the interaction between them is a fascinating game or battle of words, subtle and restrained- everything they say is so measured.
"This had always been their relationship. A dance of half-steps, a sermon of half-truths. A game of respect or mistrust, either way it still hung between them. Tom never trusted anyone fully, and Dumbledore was always too afraid with what he might do with any confidences. He had thought it always in Tom’s best interests that he had remained cautious in the details he shared with him. But history is slowly repeating itself, he thought worriedly as he pressed a hand to his throbbing temples."
Now that i've read the Broken Victory too this is especially poignant- Dumbledore's fear of Tom was another cause for bitterness and all his choices seem to be too dangerous. Either he reveals Tom's past and allows him to regain his memory and malevolence or try to restrain an innocent somehow, or teach him another way of thinking... none of them seem possible - it's such a nightmarish burden to have to work out the right balance.
The reaction of Snape to Tom is just one example of how you capture the separate effects of Voldemort's reign on the characters- it is really brilliant. The atmosphere of guilt, regret, and uncertainty above all is so skillfully created- you're story is incredibly intuitive. Percy's POV too is wonderful; i'm ashamed now to admit that i've always taken his character at face value, ie, from the negative perspective of his family- that he is pompous and rather insufferable. I regret this completely- poor dude! He didn't deserve to be derided so, just for having different attitudes, a sense of responsibility and being studious- i might be going overboard with the sympathizing with him now but it's only because i see i've been too harsh on him for too long. It's a pretty impressive feat i think, that you've changed my perspective of some characters drastically without making me think them in any way OOC. Tom and Percy most of all- but Dumbledore's uncertainty is also new yet it strikes true. Such powerful and intelligent chracters have complex and deep thoughts so their perspective must be really difficult to make convincing...
Well done on a great story. |
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| Reviewer: Carmen | Date: 2003-11-28 |
| Reviewid: 61071 | Chapter: 9 |
Amazing! You're Tom is the most brilliant interpretation ever, and I love this plot, it's so original. Beautiful writing. More soon, please!
Carmen |
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| Reviewer: Dee | Date: 2003-11-28 |
| Reviewid: 61070 | Chapter: 9 |
Oh, wow, that chess game was so cool!!!! I loved the symbolism, it was awesome. Tom and Percy squaring off, lol. And it was so tense, and then Dumbledore's perception of it was hilarious!
Tom and Dumbledore interaction is as superb as always. LOL:
Taking over, Dumbledore said, “Would it surprise you if I told you that, at one time, you were quite an excellent academic student?”
“Well, I have succeeded at chess,” was his reply.
“Yes, well, this is a little different I am afraid.” Dumbledore
LOVE Tom's wit. And Dumbledore seems to be focusing in on how to reach Tom more. I love how fleshed out Dumbledore is in your hands. All the characters, really. It really is amazing.
That last scene with Percy, Harry and Ron where they remember Ginny was so touching. You capture the characters so well.
Hope more is to come soon!!!!! This is one of the best fanfictions I have EVER read.
Dee |
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| Reviewer: OriginalMss | Date: 2003-11-08 |
| Reviewid: 59314 | Chapter: 1 |
*blinks in disbelief, then shakes head*
This is AMAZING. The writing is absolutely breathtaking, and the story and plot are so layered and complex, yet the details so subtle I learn new things each time I read it. This is a BRILLIANT story. One of the best Riddle-fics, or just HP fanfics, in existence. Your skill and handle on the characters, especially Tom, is chillingly perfect. Only second to BV, prob because you wrote that one first ;)
OM |
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| Reviewer: Andrew Wilson | Date: 2003-11-07 |
| Reviewid: 59178 | Chapter: 1 |
| I think that it is okay and pretty interesting to most people and has good qualities. |
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| Reviewer: Lorian | Date: 2003-11-05 |
| Reviewid: 58953 | Chapter: 7 |
Kate Lynn, this story is just amazing. It scares me a little bit, which is what makes is so great. You're a wonderful writer! I can't wait to read the rest!
-=Lorian=- |
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| Reviewer: Lolliar | Date: 2003-11-04 |
| Reviewid: 58723 | Chapter: 9 |
What a cliffhanger! Those last few paragraphs were just chilling in their intensity. When Percy heard Tom say 'Mudblood' it made my blood freeze the most in subsequent chapters, but really, ALL the chapters leave me just chilled or haunted, even if I also have pain in my sides from laughing. You weave it all so well.
I've never read a story that captured my attention so much. Tom Riddle's my favorite character in the Harry Potter books, and you've managed to flesh out his character more fully than I've read anywhere else.
Thank you SO much for this masterpiece.
Loll |
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| Reviewer: Pat | Date: 2003-11-04 |
| Reviewid: 58722 | Chapter: 9 |
Oh, I just adore this story! PLEASE update soon! I want to see that Lucius/Voldie scene, and what Hermione and the Trio will do!
And, as usual, your Tom is just the best ever and I can never get enough of him.
Pat |
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| Reviewer: Tipsy | Date: 2003-11-04 |
| Reviewid: 58721 | Chapter: 9 |
| I love the depth you apply to each character. You have captured every character perfectly and produce a new glimpse of them not seen in the books, but my favorites are your insights into Tom and Dumbledore. The way you express Dumbledore's sincerity and desire to try to correct past mistakes shows his greatness and human imperfections wonderfully. I love Tom's wit and I find his sly curiosity very intriguing. I just about died laughing at how he teased Harry and Draco for sniping at each other. I am fascinated by how Harry and Tom are friendly with each other in their ignorance and wonder what will happen when one or both eventually learns who each other is. This is a splendid story and I am eagerly waiting for the next part! Your style of writing carries such a difficult plot excellently and the intensity in which you write your characters is superb! |
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| Reviewer: Idig | Date: 2003-11-04 |
| Reviewid: 58720 | Chapter: 1 |
Oh, wow!!!! This is amazing! I love your Tom, he's just perfect. And pairing him with Percy is great. I also love the T/Dumbly interactions. Keep it up!!!
Idig |
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| Reviewer: Kerina | Date: 2003-11-04 |
| Reviewid: 58719 | Chapter: 9 |
Fabulous story! All the characters are perfectly IC, and the writing is amazing! It also is just a neat idea, and brings to mind so many intriguing questions. Fabulous!
K |
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| Reviewer: WarblingWeaver | Date: 2003-10-13 |
| Reviewid: 56397 | Chapter: 9 |
Love it. You've got a nice handle on all the characters, and the plot is really intriguing. I look forward to more updates!
WW |
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| Reviewer: Huntress | Date: 2003-10-09 |
| Reviewid: 55934 | Chapter: 9 |
Oh, I love this story! You portray Draco just as in canon, and i can't wait for Lucius to come back, and to figure out what's going on with Tom. You have a great gift, please write more!
H |
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| Reviewer: MorbidMistress | Date: 2003-10-09 |
| Reviewid: 55916 | Chapter: 9 |
| Fabulous. I think I like this story better than BV. Percy's last line is just so haunting. Keep it up! |
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| Reviewer: fallenpheonix | Date: 2003-10-09 |
| Reviewid: 55912 | Chapter: 9 |
Are you connected with JKR somehow? Lol, bc you are FRIGHTENINGLY IC for every damn canon. And how you expand upon them fits in so well and makes so much sense.
I love how human your Dumbledore is. To me, his strength and uncertainty is right, and fits in esp with OotP.
Your Tom is perfect, but you know that.
But, the MAIN thing here is your Percy to me. I am speechless for how you've developed him. He ISN'T totally a git, but neither is ne sympathetic and utterly put upon. HE DOES look down on his family for certain things, is embarassed by them. But at the same time, loves them and protects them from others. I can totally buy what happened to him in OotP based on the foundation you created. Even his loyalty to Dumbledore makes sense at this point, bc Dumbledore IS the figure in authority for him.
Keep it up! |
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| Reviewer: Tokens | Date: 2003-09-30 |
| Reviewid: 54897 | Chapter: 9 |
The chess metaphor was SUPERBLY done.
I love how you've captured Percy's character, and how we learn about him and Tom through thier interactions. And the philosophical and moral issues you deal with are fabulous, very much like you do in BV which I read on ff.net. And it's here, too Yay! Must reread when it's all up.
Keep up the good work!
~Tokens |
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| Reviewer: Amber | Date: 2003-09-30 |
| Reviewid: 54895 | Chapter: 1 |
OH...speechless...that's BEAUTIFULLY written. Very haunting, though. SO much good stuff in here:
'There was no more transfixing sight than the tears of despair, for which one was helpless to do anything but watch.'
He's too strong to turn away, and yet, he also has this clinical detachment and observance throughout this prologue that is just...CHILLING. Detached, and yet, not fully...
"In many ways I had pitied her as much as I'd delighted in or felt disgusted with her"
SO captures his complexity, along with explaination. She still had things she could lose and mourn.
"If nothing else, she was a creature of emotion that was uncompromising at her core."
Yup, that's our Ginny. Strong in her views at the core. A Gryffindor, who struggled but was just too young. Love Ginny. You didn't make her weak in this little bit, but not too strong. Or perhaps not too experienced is a better word.
Mmm...he would take some delight in sucking out the soul of something good like Ginny, wouldn't he? And yet, there are traces that he was a little amused with her, intrigued...but that is faint compared to the derision and scorn and superiority he felt. In the end, it comes back to his well-being.
"As I did so, I gave her a farewell befitting her part in my legacy, one she could no longer refute.
Goodnight, Virginia."
I read this two ways. The first is that he held some respect for her and wanted to give her a proper farewell. The other is that he was sickly proud of himself for his accomplishment, and now that she was silent he could still rub it in what she had meant to him - a vessel he had used. She wasn't Ginny, a friend or someone he lusted after. She was Virginia, a part in his legacy. She was perfect bc she WAS so strong and pure at heart, and he took that and turned it into power for his return at her expense. Her death left him empty - only when HE was renewed with life is he filled. It all comes back to him and his well-being in the end. But I love the traces of possible emotion - i might be readng into them too much or too little, but that's part of the fun is interpreting. 8-) |
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| Reviewer: Liz | Date: 2003-09-03 |
| Reviewid: 50585 | Chapter: 2 |
It's scary, that you've managed to make me ...not like Tom Riddle, that's impossible, I fear, but identify with him, at least. Understand him, a bit better. Believe me, that's a compliment.
Your writing style is wonderful, as well. I truly regret the fact that I hadn't read anything by you before, and I intend to keep checking. :) |
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| Reviewer: Ice | Date: 2003-08-14 |
| Reviewid: 47110 | Chapter: 8 |
| haha the bottles marked poison...ooh, freaky imagery. the corpses and the screaming...nice touch. morbid, but well done. MORE PLEASE! |
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| Reviewer: Fantome | Date: 2003-08-14 |
| Reviewid: 47006 | Chapter: 8 |
Tom's vision when he talked to Draco was really intense. Well done. I liked Draco's interaction with his father, especially when they talked about his mother.
I like the way you're revealing Tom's power, first with the crystal, then with the barrier, and it's all linked to being around Dumbledore. I really enjoy their interactions. You've got me hooked, and thanks for the quick updates! |
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| Reviewer: Fantome | Date: 2003-08-09 |
| Reviewid: 46373 | Chapter: 7 |
Tom Riddle's thoughts at the beginning of the story were amazingly well written and disturbing in a fascinating way. I appreciated the parallels between Percy's emotional control and Tom Riddle's in chapter 3. "Tom seemed to have... sensitivity for the situation." Very interesting perspective. There are many subtle observations that add intensity to the story. I never would have expected an interaction between Peeves and Tom. I loved the description of the voice Tom heard in chapter 5. It seems that Tom's sudden concern with his clothes is because he believes appearance is power. Hmm... You confirm that in McGonagall's thoughts. The speed with which he focused on the pink crystal was an effective idea to convey his potential. Snape's feelings about Voldemort in chapter 6 are very well described.
I'm enjoying this story very much. Keep up the good work. I look forward to updates. |
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| Reviewer: Daniel | Date: 2003-07-23 |
| Reviewid: 43495 | Chapter: 1 |
| When I read the story's description, and began with the prelude, I wasn't too sure I wanted to keep reading. But after the initial shock, I found the plot rather intriguing. Naturally, I keep some hope alive that you'll devise a way to revive Ginny (until you say otherwise). |
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| Reviewer: Aisling and Ryre | Date: 2003-05-05 |
| Reviewid: 30870 | Chapter: 1 |
| OMG!!!! I've only read the prelude and already I'm speechless...and crying.....NOT GINNY NNNOOOOO!!!!!!!!! |
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| Reviewer: Kate Lynn | Date: 2003-01-23 |
| Reviewid: 17529 | Chapter: 1 |
To answer your questions:
Some people knew that Riddle was Voldemort. Lucius had to, to have given Ginny the diary. But Voldemort is such an "unmentionable" topic in the wizarding world, not many ppl would know. I'd assume Dumbledore knew (bc at the end of the book CoS he says, "not many ppl connected Voldemort with the charming, handsome boy at Hogwarts." Ppl high in the Death Eaters might know, as Lucius does. So I'd assume Snape would. Dumbledore would probably tell the professors he trusts who work at the school. But why bring it up to the kids? They don't study Voldemort's history at all...it isn't taught or spoken of. The medal is there bc Tom was never proven of being the Heir, although it's known that he is now Voldie by some. Why take the medal down? It might create suspicion. So I'm assuming some ppl know, but they don't share that info. You don't leak info about such a thing as Voldemort to everyone. That's my take, at least.
-Kate |
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| Reviewer: Amberdulen | Date: 2003-01-23 |
| Reviewid: 17512 | Chapter: 3 |
| I had always assumed that nobody knew that Riddle was Voldemort until the end of Cos. Otherwise, why would Dumbledore keep around that Award for Special Services to the School? And why wouldn't Harry and especially Ginny know his real name, while they were writing in the diary? Just a thought. |
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| Reviewer: Amberdulen | Date: 2003-01-23 |
| Reviewid: 17508 | Chapter: 2 |
| I'll be dog-GONNED! I never saw that one coming. Nice, nice, nice plot manipulation. Write on! |
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| Reviewer: VJ | Date: 2003-01-07 |
| Reviewid: 15497 | Chapter: 2 |
| Wow. Just....wow! What a great fic - how on earth did you manage to make Tom so believeable and even possible to identify with? More soon, please?! |
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