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Reviews for: A Shattered Mirror
Review(s): 72

Reviewer: tomlover56Date: 2006-04-06
Reviewid: 141689Chapter: 1
I am crying over here you are awsome!:(

Reviewer: Geena WatersDate: 2005-05-22
Reviewid: 122607Chapter: 1
Oh my goodness....That was soooooo sad. What makes it even more tragic is that at the end we realize it was really Fred who died and then when George goes on pretending to be Fred....really, how could he do that....It just seems so wrong, even though I know that no one can tell them apart, he'll always know deep down and he'd have to get used to being called Fred....lol, sorry, I know it's just a story, but I honestly have tears in my eyes from it. :( Great work at this.

~GW

Reviewer: Fresh_AngelBabeDate: 2005-04-17
Reviewid: 119830Chapter: 1
That was really well-written! Quite the interesting angle to go at.

Reviewer: Reader2Date: 2005-03-18
Reviewid: 116928Chapter: 1
Well done. Extremely sad.

Reviewer: merlynDate: 2005-03-17
Reviewid: 116791Chapter: 1
...Wow. That was sad and a little creepy, and...just...wow.

When you look into the mirror, the mirror looks back at you. After all, all mirrors have two sides. Why should the one they called Fred have to be the one to die?

*shivers*

Reviewer: AstridDate: 2005-02-19
Reviewid: 114390Chapter: 1
That's so sad, deep, poignant. It's just...wow. Poor George, losing not only his best friend, his twin brother, but his identity, for the sake of Angelina and her unborn children.

Reviewer: HalanDate: 2005-02-12
Reviewid: 113719Chapter: 1
This was one of the first stories that I read when I came to Sugarquill. The way you wrote it was excellent, because it has such a fantastic twist at the end that boggles the mind.

I can only imagine the heartache that would come from losing a twin, especially losing a twin that is as close to you as Fred and George are to each other. You conveyed that perfectly, and I really liked the mirror analogy. Well done.

Reviewer: uiopDate: 2005-01-29
Reviewid: 112327Chapter: 1
Thats....Outrageous!!!!!!!!!!! Aww...Not fair. Probably because the lost identity thing between Fred/George is unlike Cannon. btw, Fred/Angelina is for sure. And George? doesn't Cannon suggest Alicia or someone? Anyways, Good Story! Care to write a sequel?

Reviewer: SaeasDate: 2004-10-27
Reviewid: 102675Chapter: 1
Wow, that was very powerful. I got slightly confused at first but worked it out. Poor George. (and Fred, too!)

Reviewer: HawkeDate: 2004-10-24
Reviewid: 102316Chapter: 1
My gods. That was... creepy? Disturbing? Out of character for the twins perhaps, but still... the *thought*. I mean, we all can imagine the twins taking each others classes and such, blah blah blah, but that...

Geeze. Well writ. Now go and kill that plot bunny before he comes up with anything else so disturbing!

Reviewer: Johanna CrystalDate: 2004-08-18
Reviewid: 97792Chapter: 1
OMG this story is...WOW. i was a lil confused for a bit then realized what u had made george do...that's really creative and original... great story!

Reviewer: BrigantiaDate: 2004-07-02
Reviewid: 90293Chapter: 1
This is a great story. What a twist! I did not see it coming.

You just keep letting out those plot bunnies, and we'll just keep reading. :)

Reviewer: ronluverDate: 2004-06-27
Reviewid: 89164Chapter: 1
woah...that was really really powerful. I liked it...a lot but at the same time im not sure if i did, but it was really really good. just kinda hard to think of one twin...*sniff*

Reviewer: Author By NightDate: 2004-04-10
Reviewid: 78058Chapter: 1
This is very interesting; please continue!

Reviewer: BridgetDate: 2004-03-30
Reviewid: 76358Chapter: 1
How clever...and well written.

Reviewer: GyakutennoDate: 2004-03-24
Reviewid: 75773Chapter: 1
Whaddaya mean, "not quite angst"? BEYOND it! George will go MAD if he has to pretend to be Fred and pretend he himself died... all through "George's" funeral and the birth of "his" kids and...

Reviewer: brettDate: 2004-03-22
Reviewid: 75444Chapter: 1
this is a beautiful story,a wonderful beautiful story

Reviewer: CaderynDate: 2004-02-21
Reviewid: 71692Chapter: 1
Wow!! Just wow!! That was just amazing! Creepy, but amazing! I just feel so bad for all of them, George especially. I mean, Fred lost his life, but George lost his identity. Ehh, who am I kidding? The story's just tragic for all of them.

The part where George put on Fred's wedding ring just gave me the chills.

I just love this. The idea is so simple, yet heart-wrenching. I could see it happening if one of the twins died.

My favorite's part has got to be:
"He could never remember having so much of everything that he had always wished for in his life, although the one thing he had taken for granted had been torn away." George has finally gotten what he'd always wanted (that is, Fred's life with Angelina), but at the prize of his twin's life.

Oh, definitely the best twin angst story I've read!

Write a more cheerful one! I wouldn't mind reading a George/Angelina fluff (*shrugs* I'm one of those rare ones).

Reviewer: O my god!Date: 2004-02-11
Reviewid: 70158Chapter: 1
OH MY GOD!!
OH MY GOD!!
OH MY GOD!!

I had to re-read that part over and over. Then it click. I swear i am crying.

its very good though. But my brain stopped working when i got to that part!!!! It's very realistic though, but if J.K.R. kills a twin in the real HP books, i swear i will..........

Reviewer: sadDate: 2004-02-11
Reviewid: 70156Chapter: 1
I LOVE THIS STORY (for how well its written). its the second time i've read it. It's SSOOOOO sad, but really well-written. i read The Promise Ring and loved it too. you are my favuorite author.

Reviewer: AliceDate: 2004-01-10
Reviewid: 66461Chapter: 1
wow! This is really good! I feel so sorry for George! His life would have been so much different!

Reviewer: MollieDate: 2003-12-06
Reviewid: 62032Chapter: 1
This is so sad! I swear I'm crying right now! It's really great but...I never imagined Fred or George dying... It's very realistic though...

Reviewer: RachaelDate: 2003-11-15
Reviewid: 60044Chapter: 1
That gave me shivers!

Reviewer: BenRGDate: 2003-09-22
Reviewid: 53999Chapter: 1
Well, that was a nice twist. Fred and George had always been interchangable. So, one day, they did change places. And, you know something? I'll bet that she'll never realise what had happened.

A great twist for the end. I had to read it three times to make sure that I had read it right. ;-)

BenRG's Rating: 7/10

Reviewer: meDate: 2003-09-10
Reviewid: 51633Chapter: 1
U NEED TO WRITE MORE LIKE THIS 1, it was good, sad, but good. i love these stories u write!

Reviewer: celestina blackDate: 2003-08-27
Reviewid: 48950Chapter: 1
oh god.
oh god.

that... i just....
the gears in my brain fell apart when the "pillar crashed onto Fredís body"
i was lost, confused... wasnt george dead?
and then it clicked, and i just said "oh god."
george IS dead.

absolutely marvelous

Reviewer: hydraspitDate: 2003-08-21
Reviewid: 48105Chapter: 1
OH MY GODS!!! thats all I can say. Excellent work.

Reviewer: DonDate: 2003-08-09
Reviewid: 46360Chapter: 1
This is one of the best written short stories on the Quill. It has a great hook. The story is well written. I like the use of flashbacks and how easily you move back and forth from the here and now to different times during the lives of the twins. Plus the characters are true and warm.

Reviewer: MaeDate: 2003-06-15
Reviewid: 36923Chapter: 1
I always do this thing where i see how well the author connected the title with the story, and i just have to say that the title of this fic fits in perfectly. But that's the kind of observation that only i would think as important. Great story, never have i thought that George would do something like that to Angelina or Fred. (or do i have that backwards?, is it George that died and fred that's lieing or is angelina dead and Fred is the one that's pregnant?)which ever one it is, i understand the plot and it was very enjoyable and original. Good work, i've always loved your stories ^-^

Reviewer: silver_blaiseDate: 2003-05-23
Reviewid: 33310Chapter: 1
nice. very nice........ahhhhhh im crying. i love geroge.

Reviewer: lalalandDate: 2003-05-12
Reviewid: 31730Chapter: 1
whaaa....???

Twins are NOT the same people by the wat that is an untrue stereotype!!! im an identical twin and me and my sister are completely different and hardly ever talk to each other!! Twins are NOT the same people, even if JKR thinks thinks so!!

Reviewer: EzmereldaDate: 2003-05-11
Reviewid: 31597Chapter: 1
Wow. What a moving piece. And the unexpected twist at the end, it took my breath away.

Reviewer: ElaineDate: 2003-05-10
Reviewid: 31514Chapter: 1
Wow! That was really good. A great ending. Never expected it. Wonderful!!

Reviewer: RonaldroseDate: 2003-05-06
Reviewid: 31046Chapter: 1
OMG. That is
Fred died and george...*sniff* If i wasn't reading this in a library I'ds be crying. Im actually struggling rather hard right now not to cry. Amazing story!!!!!!!

Reviewer: DorothyDate: 2003-05-06
Reviewid: 31036Chapter: 1
Oh, my gosh this story is soooooooooo sad, and yet beautifully written. I was confused at first. I thought it was George who had died when it was really Fred who died and George took his place as Fred. Wow. This story was incredible. I loved it. I love you're other stories as well. They are the ones that are making me keep up with them. Wonderful, just amazing. Keep it up, girl.

~SweetCherryPie~

Reviewer: MniDate: 2003-05-01
Reviewid: 30252Chapter: 1
Oh-my-god...WHAT the hell was that? I'm just skimming through your some stories and then bang!...I read this.

My mouth is hanging open...really. That was such a beautifully twisted...wonderfully cruel piece of writing. Sorry...I've got to scream.

AHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!

Okay, much better =) I loved this!!!!!!!!! Now I'm starting to become normal again. ^^

Reviewer: dr. zDate: 2003-04-25
Reviewid: 29488Chapter: 1
*sniff!* that was really well-written! i almost felt my heart plunge when i realized who had really died...

i have sisters who are twins, btw, who are an act all to themselves...

Reviewer: NightRainDate: 2003-04-21
Reviewid: 28903Chapter: 1
Oh, wow. That's kind of weird...Angelina has a right to know, doesn't she? She's gonna find out...and then George will be in for it. But I love the idea. Great and horrible at the same time. I love it.

Reviewer: AmandaDate: 2003-04-20
Reviewid: 28694Chapter: 1
Wow! *crying* That was so sad but very well written!

Reviewer: SerafinaDate: 2003-04-18
Reviewid: 28376Chapter: 1
Oh I get it now! Sorry! I'm dim! And Angelina was pregnant .... this story is really sad ...

Reviewer: SerafinaDate: 2003-04-18
Reviewid: 28375Chapter: 1
I thought you said that George died at the beginning? But att he end it said that Fred died! I'm confuzzled ... brilliant plot all the same ... sad though :'(

Reviewer: bookwrm1989@aol.comDate: 2003-04-17
Reviewid: 28359Chapter: 1
So ironic, so cool! Very sad though... I started to cry... :'( Good though!

Reviewer: K.C.Date: 2003-04-17
Reviewid: 28312Chapter: 1
omg... -crys lightly- omg... this is an awsome story, but omg..... thats like really mean, wouldn't Fred's stone say George on it? WAA! i loved this lots but "WOW" and "OMG"...

Reviewer: StephanieDate: 2003-04-14
Reviewid: 27900Chapter: 1
Wow. That was so sad... I almost cried when I read it... so sad..

But Brilliant.. you have such a way with words and stuff... I get images in my head and everything!! It's like the story is coming to life!!!

Reviewer: AshbyDate: 2003-04-14
Reviewid: 27879Chapter: 1
. . . .

. . . .

Oh, wow. Such prose. Poor Fred! Poor George! Oh, no. *sniff*

I'll be all right.

~Ashby

Reviewer: bluirinkaDate: 2003-04-13
Reviewid: 27824Chapter: 1
wow. seriously twisted, but heartwarming nonetheless. Awww, poor George! I want to give him a hug.
-Renee

Reviewer: Jade SabreDate: 2003-04-12
Reviewid: 27612Chapter: 1
ah. oh. sad. *weeps* very sad. depressing. You have to write something fluffy to make up for this WONDERFUL...but SAD...story. The bit about George saying he's Fred, so that they won't...ooh. Creepy. And beautiful, only not. I think "Who Am I?" from Les Miserables for some reason--"Must I lie...my name be no more than an alibi" or something along those lines. Poor Weasleys. I think it's worse that he just died--no heroic death from Voldemort just...ag. If I didn't have to go to bed I'd go read something fluffy. Well I'm babbling now so I'll just say--very good. Short, but powerful.

Reviewer: The White LilyDate: 2003-04-11
Reviewid: 27505Chapter: 1
Thank you all for your glorious praise. : ) I, for one, am certainly glad that I finally decided to exorcise this plot bunny by writing it. It still gives me goosebumps when I read it as well.

Would it work? I think probably not. I'm not so sure that the Weasleys would know, but I'm pretty sure that Angelina would work it out.

As for Szandara's question - Is there another plot bunny hopping into the scene? All I can say is perhaps. I already know the title, who's POV, what's happened, etc. for a sequel, but the bunny isn't quite as irritating as the first one, so I might leave it for the time being. All I can say is that if it happens, it probably won't happen before OotP comes out, because I'm insanely busy trying to meet that deadline for The Promise Ring. Unless, of course, this bunny develops teeth and a tendancy to use them when I'm trying to write...

If you're interested in another of my short stories, which is non HP related, but I've been told is similarly emotive, have a look here (http://www.fictionpress.net/read.php?storyid=931370).

Reviewer: hiDate: 2003-04-10
Reviewid: 27377Chapter: 1
sooo sad, but wellwriiten

Reviewer: armadilloDate: 2003-04-10
Reviewid: 27368Chapter: 1
Wow. I wasn't expecting that coming at all. Great idea for a fic, it was very original. Sad, but well thought out. I thought the characterization was. . . supurb! And very intreguing. Anyway, good job. Now go finish a new chapter of The Promise Ring. (Just kidding, take your time!)

Reviewer: Aisling and RyreDate: 2003-04-10
Reviewid: 27346Chapter: 1
Damn...It made me cry again...

Reviewer: IviolinistDate: 2003-04-10
Reviewid: 27307Chapter: 1
Isn't this story just the KEWLest?!? White Lily wrote this story about a month ago and sent it to me and I've been anxious to find out how the Quillers would receive it - quite the same way I did. :-)

This story gave me goosebumps. I've read it at least six times and I always end up in goosebumps, sometimes complete with tears. The twist was not at all expected. I had the same reaction as one of the other reviewers: won't someone eventually notice? But White Lily had a quick-witted response all ready for me on that front. :-) It's so sad to think that after all those years, Angelina could still not tell the twins apart. It makes the story all the more bittersweet. I especially love the fact that George could feel half of himself ripping away the moment Fred died. ::sobs::

As always, another excellent piece of writing from The White Lily. :-)

Reviewer: SreyaDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27269Chapter: 1
Oh! Oh... oh, that's just awful! Not the writing, but... oh!

Reviewer: Fawkes101Date: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27245Chapter: 1
Interesting story~ Well written. :)

Reviewer: LourdesDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27236Chapter: 1
Wow.... how very profound.... nerve tingling.... I love it. You really are good.... boy, are you good.

Reviewer: Aisling and RyreDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27226Chapter: 1
You are a goddess....almost as good as the great golden Jk Rowling herself...you have actually made me cry!
This is beutiful and horribly sad!
No!
Not Fred...not that I want George to die.
Thanks sssssoooooo much

Reviewer: HermioneDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27214Chapter: 1
:'(!!!!!!! GOD I am crying I really am. that was soooo sad! still really well wreten as always.

Hermione

Reviewer: googligooDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27184Chapter: 1
that was so sad. but reading all your stories told u may have 2, even 3 different hats. they include humor,fluff, and sadness,or maybe suspens.
GOOD JOB

googligoo

Reviewer: kazzaDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27180Chapter: 1
Poor George. Poor Fred.
Such a bittersweet story.

Reviewer: SzandaraDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27171Chapter: 1
Ok, that was creepy. Brilliant, sad, well-written, and more than a little disturbing. I can't imagine that Angelina won't figure it out eventually--she and the real Fred must have shared memories that George doesn't know. Were they dressed alike at the time of the accident? How will she feel when she realizes? Will she go along with it? Is there another plot bunny hopping into the scene? Much as I want more of The Promise Ring, I'd also like to see a follow-up to this....

Reviewer: JoeDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27170Chapter: 1
Very clever story. Terrific, unexpected twist at the end.

Reviewer: KateDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27150Chapter: 1
*Frantically rubbing hands up and down arms to get rid of goosebumps*. I'm not quite sure what to say about that story. It was brilliant, and disturbing, and chilling, and twisted, and thought provoking...all at the same time! What a great idea. I'm once again in awe of your talent. Please, keep it up!

Reviewer: AlkariDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27148Chapter: 1
Excellent! A twist that is in the traditions of many of the finest short story writers -worthy of Saki, Poe, O'Henry et al.

No wonder you let this plot bunny out!

Reviewer: BJHDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27141Chapter: 1
Now THAT was one heck of a bunny!

I, somehow, don't mind not having another chapter of The Promis Ring right now.

BJH

Reviewer: LilacDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27136Chapter: 1
Oooo...nice twist there at the end. Didn't see it coming. That's very sweet of him, in a way, to take over for Fred. I love those twins! *prays silently that nothing like this will happen*

Reviewer: Jessica V.Date: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27132Chapter: 1
aaaaaaaw...that's so sad...but it's an interesting twist at the ending...but still that's depressing...i can never imagine either one of the twins dead!?!?!?!!

Reviewer: wm_lawDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27109Chapter: 1
Oh my god. I'm speechless. That was exceptional.

Reviewer: wslamexeDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27095Chapter: 1
wha?!?!?!?!?!?
do this story has a part on "Te promise ring" universe????
please tell me or email me or something!!!!

MAN!!!!!!
is that CHUCKY OR what!!!!!!!

Reviewer: mattDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27093Chapter: 1
I don't get it... Who died?

Reviewer: reedy70002Date: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27088Chapter: 1
see now I didn't see that comming
very clever

Reviewer: PixierelishDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27074Chapter: 1
Oh! So sad, and yet so clever! You are an excellent writer. Well done!

Reviewer: ScarlettDate: 2003-04-09
Reviewid: 27070Chapter: 1
Wow! that's a really interesting piece. You're an excellent writer.

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