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Review(s): 1
| Reviewer: Luminous Marble | Date: 2003-09-17 |
| Reviewid: 53080 | Chapter: 1 |
What a good idea to let a Hufflepuff have his day! Justin doesn't get to be the hero very often--although Mandy was fairly brave herself until the hairy beast showed himself.
There are a few places with mistakes in spelling or grammar. One of my favorite things at the Sugar Quill is here: http://www.sugarquill.net/index.php?action=gringotts&st=grammar. It's hard to see the mistakes we make ourselves, and I think most people who entered wanted to keep their story a secret from the world (so, no beta!). I myself could spend an afternoon immersed there. :)
I think it was really clever to name your Quintaped Andrew. I had to find my copy of Fantastic Beasts and track down the story. It's fun to think about the Quintaped history becoming intertwined with some Hogwarts kids, and it was also a little sad to see a MacBoon so lost in the beast that he can't remember his wizarding self. Thanks for writing. |
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