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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: Forbidden Choices
Review(s): 6

Reviewer: KellieDate: 2003-09-03
Reviewid: 50509Chapter: 1
How cute! It's an angsty!Firenze.

It makes sense that he might have been a bit of an outcast from the beginning.

Reviewer: Darwin's ApprenticeDate: 2003-09-03
Reviewid: 50422Chapter: 1
Nice foreshadowing. I like the idea of a young Firenze being wise enough to see the start of his own problems. And then still be brave enought to carry through the decision later. Good job.

Reviewer: SilverMoonDate: 2003-09-01
Reviewid: 50071Chapter: 1
WOW! This is wonderfully written. You captured the essence of Firenze and the forest perfectly. It's a beautiful story, and it's told with so much feeling. You're a very talented writer. Keep up the good work!

-SilverAries

Reviewer: Lupins LairDate: 2003-09-01
Reviewid: 49970Chapter: 1
You captured Firenze's turmoil and confusion really well, I thought. Especially by having him get lost and bumping into/disturbing all sorts creatures in the process. It is obvious you had your FBAWTFT right beside you the whole time writing this.

It was also great to read about someone being lost (in the emotional/psychological sense) other than the humans. Maybe someday you might write the sequel to this, as in how he made the choice to work for Dumbledore at Hogwarts in OotP?

You might just want to be a little careful with the punctuation though. Overall, it's not bad at all, but just to be aware of full stops, commas and the ensuing capitalisations whenever you finish a quote.

Reviewer: JessanndiDate: 2003-08-31
Reviewid: 49783Chapter: 1
A well written piece that thoughtfully considers why Firenze is so different to the other Centaurs.

A lot of good research also went into the piece through the use of FBAWTFT. It is always important to thoughly research a subject on which you are going to write.

It could have been a bit over the top, a fantastical beast at every turn but because you main character if Firenze you have made it work. As he would be fully in tune with the forest and it's other inhabitants.

Reviewer: mdelaurDate: 2003-08-31
Reviewid: 49556Chapter: 1
ooohhh!!! I like it! I read your reply on the forum... your story is terrific! Why were you worried in the first place? Care to read mine??? Please do! I've been trying to give reviews to first time authors like myself but I have yet to have someone reply to mine. Would you? It's called Reunion on a Golden Dawn by Corielle and mdelaur. It's not as well written as yours, but I haven't gotten another perspective and hope to have one soon.
P.S. Your story is soooo good! Please continue with the story!!

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