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Review(s): 7
| Reviewer: Darwin's Apprentice | Date: 2003-09-03 |
| Reviewid: 50426 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is a nice piece of work. I like that you have Cho a bundle of nerves. That seems to match the Cho of the last book. The story moves along well, which you need for a 1000 word limit. You might be trying to do too much in just 1000 words. The harnessing of unicorns and the threatening man seem more like a cartoon villain. But I like the emotions you are working with. Keep up the good work! |
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| Reviewer: Lupins Lair | Date: 2003-09-02 |
| Reviewid: 50287 | Chapter: 1 |
Lovely depiction of Cho going from terrified and shrieking, to gathering herself up to be calm and courageous.
Wonder how the men got into Hogwarts. |
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| Reviewer: kristine | Date: 2003-09-02 |
| Reviewid: 50160 | Chapter: 1 |
| Marcella and Corielle~ this is real good i liked it! Maybe some day you'll write the 10th? harry potter book (or whatever number they may be on!) well i thought it was good! Good luck (youll need it!!) just kidding!!! |
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| Reviewer: Trib | Date: 2003-09-02 |
| Reviewid: 50142 | Chapter: 1 |
You guyz did sooooooo good on ur story!!!!!! It actually caught my attention and made me wanna read it...i can't wait for ur next story to come out mdelaur!!! Keep it up!!!!
*PROVI RULES (EAST DOESN'T) AND DRACO MALFOY IS HOTT* |
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| Reviewer: SilverMoon | Date: 2003-09-01 |
| Reviewid: 49877 | Chapter: 1 |
| WOW! This is a beautiful fic. You did a great job with Cho's character and the sheer emotion in this fic makes it a brilliant read. Keep up the good work, and keep writing, you have great potential. |
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| Reviewer: CheddarTrek | Date: 2003-08-31 |
| Reviewid: 49575 | Chapter: 1 |
| Wow! Great Story, and that's a great personification of Cho, you kept her very well in canon, and the baby unicorn was such a great idea. Thanks so much for reviewing my fic, I appreciate the comments. Also, I'd like to ask that you keep writing some stories with Cho, you do her very well. EXCELLENT JOB! |
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