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Reviews for: A Night's Loss
Review(s): 5

Reviewer: brettDate: 2004-04-07
Reviewid: 77590Chapter: 1
its soo goood!! but soo sad!! i really like it

Reviewer: HPNannaDate: 2003-10-22
Reviewid: 57456Chapter: 1
I read "A Friendly Visit" out of pure chance and your excellent story script made me move on to read "Some Fatherly Advice". They are two excellent pieces. I loved the humor, the camaraderie of the friends in death ... It was sad, hilarious, heartfelt, EXCELLENT!!
HOWEVER, I SIMPLY LOVE REMUS"s CHARACTER. I love his soft spoken manner and I daresay that he is on an equal level with Harry, Dumbledore and Arthur W. line of my all time favorites.
This story made me cry like a 5 yr old. I could just relate with the pain that he may have felt at the time of Sirius' death. I believe it's a great piece as in OftP we had such a small piece on how Remus felt at this lost. This sort of completed that gap that I had in my mind and heart.
Great writing, KEEP IT UP!

Reviewer: HeatherDate: 2003-10-13
Reviewid: 56386Chapter: 1
NOOOOOOO!!!!!! REMUS!! *sniff*

Reviewer: NigellaDate: 2003-09-19
Reviewid: 53419Chapter: 1
No reviews?! What a shame - it deserves them. Poor Remus must be the unluckiest werewolf ever. I'm glad to see him grieving like this - I'm not so keen on the 'I don't want to think about Padfoot because it hurts too much' sort of approach! Hopefully now he's howled all night he'll be better able to go and see Harry and help him do the same - I think he needs to. Thanks for the healing tears.

Reviewer: JulieDate: 2003-09-04
Reviewid: 50726Chapter: 1
Wow. You've really caught the way I imagine Remus is feeling. To be the last one left, again - it must be something out of his worst nightmares. Your imagery that part of the wolf was dead is very powerful.

You have some great lines in here. I [i]love[/i] the "motley, mismatched, mischievous pack". And "He craved human meat, but would settle for a rat" just makes me shiver.

I'm just going to mention two little jarring notes I saw. First (and this is just something I feel), for some reason the phrase "drive him nuts" doesn't seem to fit Remus. You could use "insane" or "mad" instead of "nuts".

Second, you have a few sentences in the middle where you switched to present tense; the rest of the story is in past. When I first read them, I thought you were switching to present tense for the wolf's experiences (which could be a compelling use of language), but you went back to past tense after a few sentences. You should settle on one or the other.

Overall, a gripping story.

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