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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 1

Reviewer: TapestryDate: 2003-09-04
Reviewid: 50677Chapter: 1
I really enjoyed this story. You had a lot of great descriptions, such as "great gray gnarled trunks." This was also a very effective use of first person narrative. There are a few typos you'll want to watch out for and I'm a little confused about how the first line was addressed to? Did Minerva think that Dumbledore was a student sneaking into one of the classrooms or something? You might consider making that more clear. Also, was Hagrid wrestling with the troll playfully? As in the troll was a willing participant or not? He seemed rather aggressive and I that doesn't seem quiet in character, I can see him wrestling the troll for fun if the troll was also willing, but not hunting down and assaulting trolls without cause. I hope you'll write more, and I certainly love to see more of your writing on McGonagall. Thanks for sharing and good luck with your writing.

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