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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: The Animagi
Review(s): 2

Reviewer: JennyDate: 2003-09-20
Reviewid: 53662Chapter: 1
Your story was very interesting. I like Lily being an Animagus, I hadn't thought about that before. I liked the last bit about Dumbledore and the Chocolate frogs.

Reviewer: TapestryDate: 2003-09-04
Reviewid: 50671Chapter: 1
I think this is a good premise and you definitely have the beginings of a good story. It's very hard for me to follow the story after the first part, however, as it seems to jump around an awful lot and it feels as if there are sections missing. Possibly that's because of the size restrictions placed on entries to the contest? For example, Snape just seems to appear with no explanation and no apparent reason. It's confusing to the reader. I think if you go back and add some transitions and flesh out the scenes a bit more it will be fine though. One thing - I don't think Madam Pomfrey, even with a full house, would let Remus go to the shack on his own. The risk of a Werewolf loose on school grounds is just too great for her to ever put anything ahead of that. But as I said good concept and with a bit of work this could be really, really good. Thanks for sharing your story and good luck in your future writings.

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