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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 4

Reviewer: anything but verDate: 2004-02-06
Reviewid: 69704Chapter: 1
Tom that was totally wicked I loved it!how's your servant ver?(she is adunce ,iswear!

Reviewer: verDate: 2004-02-06
Reviewid: 69701Chapter: 1
i just wish i was as clever as u! if i'd known u i'll be ur servant plz like me

Reviewer: Darwin's ApprenticeDate: 2003-09-06
Reviewid: 51002Chapter: 1
Nice concept! I like the way the tree was able to save itself.

Reviewer: TapestryDate: 2003-09-04
Reviewid: 50667Chapter: 1
This was very different, I like that this read as play script. However, there are parts that read like traditional fanfic as well. You may want to stick to one form as that will give the story a more cohesive feel. For example eliminating descriptive lines that have interior monologue or emotion attribution, and converting them to a more stage direction feel as many of the other sentences are aleardy. Also, there are some typos and other little grammar errors that need addressing, such as using initial caps on Worm Wood Tree in one place but not all. I wasn't sure about how Aragog fit in the story, I think it might be stronger if you remove him as he doesn't seem to be adding much and you already have enough characters for such a short piece. Anyway, good job and good luck with your future projects :)

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