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Review(s): 4
| Reviewer: Anastasia | Date: 2003-11-29 |
| Reviewid: 61086 | Chapter: 1 |
Wow! Great MissingMoment story! I love reading about Remus, Sirius and James. (I don't like Wormtail/Peter, though, because he's a real idiot!) Anyway, I wish you good lyck with all futur projects: I very much enjoyed this one. Keep up the good work.
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| Reviewer: Catherine | Date: 2003-09-12 |
| Reviewid: 52102 | Chapter: 1 |
Folks are a little out of character, and this is a bit disjunctured.
I like the technique of using the different flashes of memory.
Catherine |
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| Reviewer: Tapestry | Date: 2003-09-03 |
| Reviewid: 50442 | Chapter: 1 |
| Nice blend of present and flashback scenes, you worked them in very effectively. One thing, in the scene were Dumbledore is showing Remus the whomping willow you have two minor mistakes. Remus's response should be "I am!" rather than "I do!" Also, the shack isn't in the whomping willow, the secret tunnel leads to it. Other than those two minor things great job! I hope to see more of your work posted on the Quill. |
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