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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: The Ruined Forest
Review(s): 6

Reviewer: Luminous MarbleDate: 2003-09-17
Reviewid: 53081Chapter: 1
Wow. You had one of the most contest-themed stories, and one of the most moving I've read, too. I can tell that your ability to understand how the characters are feeling--and how they should be feeling (because they are very canon-like in their actions and speech)--will be a great asset to you as a writer.

That said, there are a lot of mistakes. I find this page:
http://www.sugarquill.net/index.php?action=gringotts&st=grammar
very,very useful. I've been taking it a little at a time and I think it has helped me grow as a writer.

I was really moved by the ending. Hagrid and Aragog have a special bond that no half-giant and Acromantula have ever had, and I sometimes forget that they really are friends. For Hagrid to do something so special to grant a friend's dying wish was incredible. I can only hope to be a friend like that.

Thanks for writing.

Reviewer: CloverDate: 2003-09-07
Reviewid: 51108Chapter: 1
This is one of the most saddest story I've ever read.Anyway, the way you described Aragog's homeland was perfect. I just want you to know that you are a good writer.

Reviewer: ChrisDate: 2003-09-06
Reviewid: 50984Chapter: 1
This is a very moving story...it makes me very glad that Aragog has Hagrid on his side.

Reviewer: aishaDate: 2003-09-06
Reviewid: 50974Chapter: 1
very touching and sad.*sniff*

Reviewer: CatherineDate: 2003-09-04
Reviewid: 50653Chapter: 1
Very touching and sad.

Catherine

Reviewer: Fawkes101Date: 2003-09-01
Reviewid: 49987Chapter: 1
This was an brilliant original piece. It was very interesting to read. Great job! One thing: It's took no time to travel back to Forbidden Forest. I think you meant It took no time to travel back to the Forbidden Forest. That was the only criticism.

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