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Review(s): 6
| Reviewer: Luminous Marble | Date: 2003-09-17 |
| Reviewid: 53081 | Chapter: 1 |
Wow. You had one of the most contest-themed stories, and one of the most moving I've read, too. I can tell that your ability to understand how the characters are feeling--and how they should be feeling (because they are very canon-like in their actions and speech)--will be a great asset to you as a writer.
That said, there are a lot of mistakes. I find this page:
http://www.sugarquill.net/index.php?action=gringotts&st=grammar
very,very useful. I've been taking it a little at a time and I think it has helped me grow as a writer.
I was really moved by the ending. Hagrid and Aragog have a special bond that no half-giant and Acromantula have ever had, and I sometimes forget that they really are friends. For Hagrid to do something so special to grant a friend's dying wish was incredible. I can only hope to be a friend like that.
Thanks for writing. |
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| Reviewer: Clover | Date: 2003-09-07 |
| Reviewid: 51108 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is one of the most saddest story I've ever read.Anyway, the way you described Aragog's homeland was perfect. I just want you to know that you are a good writer. |
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| Reviewer: Chris | Date: 2003-09-06 |
| Reviewid: 50984 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is a very moving story...it makes me very glad that Aragog has Hagrid on his side. |
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| Reviewer: Fawkes101 | Date: 2003-09-01 |
| Reviewid: 49987 | Chapter: 1 |
| This was an brilliant original piece. It was very interesting to read. Great job! One thing: It's took no time to travel back to Forbidden Forest. I think you meant It took no time to travel back to the Forbidden Forest. That was the only criticism. |
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