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Review(s): 10
| Reviewer: Madison | Date: 2005-08-29 |
| Reviewid: 131234 | Chapter: 1 |
| wow, that's really good but isn't a Shakespearean sonnet supposed to ryhme A, B, A, B. Rather than A, A, B, B like this one? And the last two lines being the only to the rhyme A, A! It creates a great image though, makes evil seem peaceful somehow, bloody brillient acheivement! |
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| Reviewer: Lia | Date: 2004-08-03 |
| Reviewid: 95439 | Chapter: 1 |
Hello!
I liked the poem, but it can't truly be called a Shakespearian, which I spelled horribly wrong, sonnet. You see, a sonnet of that kind is composed abab cdcd efef gg you know? Every other line rhymes, and then a couplet at the bottom. Three quatrains and a couplet. It was still a very nice poem, but a Shakesp. Sonnet. |
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| Reviewer: Val | Date: 2004-05-19 |
| Reviewid: 83373 | Chapter: 1 |
| I really like this poem, but I believe the rhyme scheme in a shakesperean poem is slightly different. I think it is ABAB CDCD EFEF GG. Just a bit of constructive criticism. |
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| Reviewer: July 31 | Date: 2004-04-27 |
| Reviewid: 80435 | Chapter: 1 |
Very very good, i like the impersonation of shakespeare.
Blank verse....*shudder*
But good job! |
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| Reviewer: Jeremy | Date: 2004-04-17 |
| Reviewid: 79227 | Chapter: 1 |
| Maybe this is nitpicking, but I thought a Shakespearean sonnet has a different rhyme scheme, as ABABCDCD EFEFGG?? |
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| Reviewer: piratelover | Date: 2004-02-19 |
| Reviewid: 71463 | Chapter: 1 |
I like the part:
"For them the heavens are an open book,
To anyone with sight enough to look," |
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| Reviewer: Kaikura Tenshi | Date: 2003-11-25 |
| Reviewid: 60669 | Chapter: 1 |
This was a great poem, but not in the proper format for a sonnet, or a shakespearian sonnet. They're generally divided eight lines on the top asking a question, or proposing something, or setting up a situation, and the bottom six lines answering the question, resolving the situation, or giving an unexpected ending. Thay also generally have a different rhyme scheme.
I do like the poem--you managed to keep the rhyme scheme you did use without it getting tacky like some people can, including myself. I'm quite impressed with that. I think some of your images are amazing, too. It was a really good poem, but I'm specializing in Shakepearian era literature and I have a thing for sonnets, and it's just a thing that really catches at my nerves...it's really not a bad poem, it's just not a sonnet in the current form, and I thought I'd let you know.
Good job!
~Kai =^_^= |
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| Reviewer: Marie Arouet | Date: 2002-11-24 |
| Reviewid: 9976 | Chapter: 1 |
| Very well written indeed :) I especially like your incorporations of Shakespeare's style of writing. |
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