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Review(s): 37
| Reviewer: Piggily | Date: 2006-11-13 |
| Reviewid: 146170 | Chapter: 1 |
That was very good! I liked it a lot. My one query, though, is this: what becomes of the "second" Albus Dumbledore in the current timeline (that is, the one who was a participant in the changed timeline)? From comments, his "original" self is still asleep in his office and he will be given the "new" memories, but what happens to the one who knocked the "original" out?
This is what differs from the way JKR's version reads. In hers, we end up with only one Hermione and one Harry in the end (we will call these HH2) because the others (HH1 - the ones who we follow the story of first) exist in the time stream only up to a point, after which they loop back, becoming HH2. HH1 and HH2 only coexist for about 3 hours, after which HH1 goes back and HH2 continue forward. The end of your story, on the other hand, seems (unless I'm reading something wrong) to end up with two Dumbledores going on, though I don't know what is to become of AD2, to use a description analogous to my designations for Harry and Hermione. |
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| Reviewer: SnorkackCatcher | Date: 2006-08-17 |
| Reviewid: 144850 | Chapter: 1 |
Hi -- I just wanted to say that I liked this a lot, enough so that I Niffled it at FictionAlley. So not for the first time, congratulations and all that!
The Niffle URL is:
http://forums.fictionalley.org/park/showthread.php?s=&threadid=115715
Regards
SnorkackCatcher |
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| Reviewer: Me | Date: 2005-06-12 |
| Reviewid: 123818 | Chapter: 1 |
| I was just reading the reviews and thinking over about your story. This could be a possible way that this all happened. Me and my sister wonders how dumbledore knew what was happening at Hagrid's cabin. Also, we wondered with the fact that if Harry died when he and sirius was attacked by the dementors, how could Harry go back to save himself and this story might be what actually happened. It's cool. Lol |
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| Reviewer: Norwegian Blue | Date: 2004-10-27 |
| Reviewid: 102703 | Chapter: 1 |
| You've got Dumbledore down to an art, Mr. Jack. Most people who try to write Dumbledore fail miserably, but you've got him down. If you get any other ideas in the future about Dumbledore, I suggest you get them down. |
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| Reviewer: Eirene | Date: 2004-07-19 |
| Reviewid: 93046 | Chapter: 1 |
| Another brilliant piece, Jack! There isn't much I can really say, but it was very well written, great plot, and I loved the comment about the wall thinking it's a door. |
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| Reviewer: Gyakutenno | Date: 2004-07-17 |
| Reviewid: 92799 | Chapter: 1 |
| AAAAUGH! If you don't explain it, I'll die of this headache! I couldn't figure it out, just that all hell had successfully broke loose at the beginning... Is it going in circles? Ah, I've read it over and now it makes sense! Very good! |
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| Reviewer: Lizzy | Date: 2004-06-27 |
| Reviewid: 89097 | Chapter: 1 |
| Confusing or what!?!? Brilliant though! Yay time travel! Incredibly well written, fantastic plot and decent style too! I love it! |
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| Reviewer: anna M | Date: 2004-05-23 |
| Reviewid: 84116 | Chapter: 1 |
| This makes a lot of sense, in a very warped way! I've often wondered when re-reading PoA how exactly Dumbledore knew what was going on at Hagrid's cabin, because the amusement in his voice hints that he knows exactly what was going on. This story is a great possible explanation. |
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| Reviewer: CornedBee | Date: 2004-05-22 |
| Reviewid: 84065 | Chapter: 1 |
Upon reading some of the other comments I want to add this. I've had a lengthy discussion on the nature of time-travel in PoA on the ThinkPotter community board (and I'm sure there are even longer discussions here and elsewhere), and we concluded that the version portrayed in this story is wrong.
http://community.thinkpotter.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=1381
See the URL for more details.
Still, doesn't change the fact that your DD is wonderfully executed. |
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| Reviewer: CornedBee | Date: 2004-05-22 |
| Reviewid: 84064 | Chapter: 1 |
| Very nice, except that it goes completely against my take of time-travel. So, this is the first story of yours that I don't like that much, but I can't blame you for this. |
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| Reviewer: Mengya | Date: 2004-04-25 |
| Reviewid: 80140 | Chapter: 1 |
I really like this piece, not just for all the bizarre doors of possibilities it opens, but for the sheer -ache- of it. You have captured Dumbledore in his weakness, and collapsing under all his burdens.
"He probably didn't even notice the bite on his shoulder, or that this was his last full moon as a human."
Lovely. |
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| Reviewer: Dex | Date: 2004-01-24 |
| Reviewid: 68226 | Chapter: 1 |
| A lot of thought went into this story, and it shines through clear as anything. Well-concieved, brilliantly executed. |
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| Reviewer: Elfir | Date: 2003-12-23 |
| Reviewid: 64546 | Chapter: 1 |
Definately a story I had to read twice to fully understand. It's amazing to find someone who understood that part of PoA completely. So completely you were able to add further time travel complications to it.
Have you thought about writing a little more AU regarding the corrected timeline? I love the idea of a darker world where Ron's a werewolf, Sirius is dead two years early, and Harry (I assume) was Kissed. |
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| Reviewer: Bobbi | Date: 2003-12-19 |
| Reviewid: 63989 | Chapter: 1 |
I'm really impressed that you thought it all out and managed to get your head round it; I certainly couldn't! I think I understood the time thing ... I think.... In any case, it's a great little fic!
Bobbi |
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| Reviewer: Talking Purple Rabbits | Date: 2003-12-18 |
| Reviewid: 63894 | Chapter: 1 |
Ooh, Jack! Just had a thought!
I thought Dumbledore had given his Time Turner to Hermione...which he apparently did, otherwise your story wouldn't hold. So he....has two of them?
And how come Dumbledore has Time Turners and Fudge doesn't? Or Voldemort? (I'm assuming that otherwise Voldie would have taken over the world by now if he could, just go back, kill Harry, and be done with it.)
And how come if Dumbledore has a Time Turner, he hasn't fixed the mess that was OotP? He could have stopped Harry from running off to the MoM, could have gone back and taught him Occlumency better, could have...done any number of things. So what's stopping him?
(Sorry, not a nitpick, just playing Devil's Apprentice. I'll offer my own suggestion, however weak: a Time Turner can only used a certain number of times by one person before it stops working...or something like that. Otherwise the whole thing would be messed up, now wouldn't it?)
~TPR :D |
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| Reviewer: Talking Purple Rabbits | Date: 2003-12-18 |
| Reviewid: 63893 | Chapter: 1 |
Whoah...dude...
What an idea! That things didn't work out! That Harry and Sirius....were... And Ron!
You know, Jack, you're good at this writing stuff. Really good. Ever thought of making a profession of it? (And if you have, disregard that last comment. ;)
I'm going down the list of your stories, enjoying each just as much as the last. :) (Well, I could hardly be expected to pick one over the other, could I?)
off to the next bit,
~TPR |
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| Reviewer: kayjal | Date: 2003-12-18 |
| Reviewid: 63845 | Chapter: 1 |
| JAck jack jack.. you know that u have me in your legion of fans right ? need i say more ? ok. ok. FABULOUS. happy now ? * hmph* boys n their ego's |
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| Reviewer: Twilight Sorceress | Date: 2003-11-25 |
| Reviewid: 60666 | Chapter: 1 |
I bow to your towering intellect.
I love sensitive, smart, funny men who love HP. I'll be waiting with anticipation for another story!
I think someone suggested you write a sequel to "Of Contraceptives and Snogging," in which they use the potion. Ever considered that...? |
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| Reviewer: Beaker | Date: 2003-11-16 |
| Reviewid: 60280 | Chapter: 1 |
OK, so let me get this straight: there were TWO time-turners involved that night? Sure, why not! And I can see exactly why Dumbledore would have decided it was time. Harry gone...Ron bitten. <shiver!> There was an awful lot more that could have gone wrong that night, even beyond what did and was corrected, wasn't there?
Thanks for a fun read. |
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| Reviewer: Kass | Date: 2003-11-16 |
| Reviewid: 60217 | Chapter: 1 |
WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW!!! Really Really good
I got shivers when i read about what happened to Ron you wrote that part great like just Wow great writing on every part as my second grade teacher would say "very Colorfull" YOU ROCK!!!! |
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| Reviewer: Linda | Date: 2003-11-16 |
| Reviewid: 60191 | Chapter: 1 |
| Great story! I got a little confused at first (time travel stories do that to me) but it all made sense in the end. Nice job! |
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| Reviewer: Dorothy | Date: 2003-11-15 |
| Reviewid: 60101 | Chapter: 1 |
| That was excellent! A little mind-boggling, with all the different times, but it was really cool! |
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| Reviewer: LaceyRice56 | Date: 2003-11-15 |
| Reviewid: 60092 | Chapter: 1 |
Wow!
I really like your take on the story!
I definitely enjoyed reading it and hope that you decide to do more!
-Andrew -- Feeling Like a Sycophant |
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| Reviewer: Cat | Date: 2003-11-15 |
| Reviewid: 60079 | Chapter: 1 |
| i love you jack! ur superior knowledge of all that is HP astounds me! MARRY ME?? Great story as always! |
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| Reviewer: miss_lily_lupin | Date: 2003-11-15 |
| Reviewid: 60077 | Chapter: 1 |
| The beginning is very well written! I am in awe! And then how to made everything fold out! It was just a great piece that was very well thought out! |
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| Reviewer: Frank Rawland | Date: 2003-11-15 |
| Reviewid: 60067 | Chapter: 1 |
How fortunate for us all that the Potter books create such a complete world, yet are so open to such versatile reinterpretations.
Well done. |
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| Reviewer: Justine | Date: 2003-11-15 |
| Reviewid: 60059 | Chapter: 1 |
| Ooh very clever! Your stories are all so thought- provoking. I love Dumbledore not knowing what he was doing, but just being a good man and wanting things to be right. It fits in with his very human character in OotP. |
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| Reviewer: amulder | Date: 2003-11-15 |
| Reviewid: 60035 | Chapter: 1 |
Well done bit of 'what if'. Good job writing different perspectives on the stuff in PoA.
However... there are now *two* Dumbledore's in the world that you created. How did you get rid of one of them? Time loop stories *are* difficult, aren't they? JKR just wrote a time loop that *fit* with things the first time around, you've written one where someone intentionally *changed* things, which gives us the two Dumbledores...
thanks for sharing. |
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| Reviewer: Don | Date: 2003-11-15 |
| Reviewid: 60033 | Chapter: 1 |
| Wow! That was cunningly done! The end was great! Or should I say beginning? Just very clever! This explains so much of the scenes in PoA. But your balance is the best! I'll need to read it again to get it all! Which is a great task! |
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| Reviewer: niki | Date: 2003-11-15 |
| Reviewid: 60028 | Chapter: 1 |
| that was fabulous! and extra points for tackling the time issue so well. in many other people's hand, things refering to time travel are so hard to understand . . . You know,if something happened in the past and then someone went back in time to change it, it never really happened because of the person of the future's actions. However if that's the case, then no one would have ever gone back in time to change it. But if that's true then suddenly whatever was the problem in the first place *did* happen and therefore a person in the future *would* have to go back and fix and that means that means . . . none of that nonesense in your story. Once again: Excellent! |
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| Reviewer: Chris | Date: 2003-11-14 |
| Reviewid: 60004 | Chapter: 1 |
Oh thanks, Jack...now my mind is spinning and spinning! What a clever concept, and well written, as usual. This line is absolutely perfect for Dumbledore, too:
“No, it's a bit of wall that thinks it's a door. The castle has a sense of humour.” Despite the situation, Dumbledore allowed himself a smile. |
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