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Review(s): 17
| Reviewer: Gwendolyn | Date: 2003-12-23 |
| Reviewid: 64619 | Chapter: 1 |
| Very sweet! Maybe I'm not looking in the right places, but I rarely find anything about Neville. This was very well done. I think you showed his fears and nervousness well in your writing. My favorite part is when he says "I was in Gryffindor. I belonged in Gryffindor" because, as we see from OotP, he really does. Thank you for showing me some of the deep insights of a Longbottom. |
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| Reviewer: h-kitty | Date: 2003-12-06 |
| Reviewid: 61968 | Chapter: 1 |
| Yay! I really like how you chose to write from Neville's POV . . . he's a really interesting character, and not many writers address the reasons why he was sorted into Gryffindor. You've done a great job of capturing Neville's voice--a little timid and self-conscious. Good work! |
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| Reviewer: Valerie | Date: 2003-12-05 |
| Reviewid: 61955 | Chapter: 1 |
"I was in Gryffindor. I belonged in Gryffindor.
I really hoped it was true."
Too right, it's true, Mr. Longbottom!! And you'll realize that when you kick some Death Eater ass for Harry Potter, too!
That was a really sweet fic. I absolutely love the new bout of Neville fics coming out, and this one is definitly one of the best. I really liked how you followed his thought processes. Good job! |
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| Reviewer: Becky | Date: 2003-12-05 |
| Reviewid: 61954 | Chapter: 1 |
| Yay for Neville love! I thought this was the perfect characterization for a young Neville and a very sweet story. I also loved the little embarassing moment at the end before a perfect finish. |
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| Reviewer: Becky | Date: 2003-12-05 |
| Reviewid: 61953 | Chapter: 1 |
| Yay for Neville love! I thought this was the perfect characterization for a young Neville and a very sweet story. I also loved the little embarassing moment at the end before a perfect finish. |
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| Reviewer: MrRobertsIII | Date: 2003-12-05 |
| Reviewid: 61926 | Chapter: 1 |
Good job! Very sweet.
The hat gave a sort of harrumph in my head. Hufflepuff is not a house of duffers, just as Slytherin is not a house entirely peopled by monsters, no matter what the rumours may say
-The key word being "entirely" |
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| Reviewer: Birdsong | Date: 2003-12-05 |
| Reviewid: 61918 | Chapter: 1 |
| I thought you did well presenting Neville's fears and what his sorting would have been like. Good job! |
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| Reviewer: Scarlett | Date: 2003-12-05 |
| Reviewid: 61895 | Chapter: 1 |
| Great inner dialogue, very IC. Very insightful, using Neville asking Hermione for help with Trevor to demonstrate Neville's bravery. |
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| Reviewer: VJA | Date: 2003-12-05 |
| Reviewid: 61889 | Chapter: 1 |
| Excellent! Poor Neville - clever of you to have those little snippets of his past in his inner monologue. And "I should know - I was his hat" made me smile. |
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| Reviewer: Don | Date: 2003-12-05 |
| Reviewid: 61873 | Chapter: 1 |
Nice work! Always good to see Neville get some face time. I think you do a good job of catching Neville's nervousness. Very appropriate.
I look forward to more of your work. |
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| Reviewer: Aerin | Date: 2003-12-05 |
| Reviewid: 61867 | Chapter: 1 |
| Hehe. I just love Neville. This story is so cute. I like how you've fitted Neville's personality with the writing style. The Sorting is a really original place to fit this in, and you've made Neville into a darling. I love his nevousness and the hat's response to this piece. Great job! |
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| Reviewer: Crystal | Date: 2003-12-05 |
| Reviewid: 61859 | Chapter: 1 |
<<it shows more bravery to admit that one has fears and to face them than it does to try to show no fear at all.>>
That's the truth! This is an excellent character sketch of Neville. I think you did him justice. He's shown the world he belongs in Gryffindor, hasn't he?
And thank you for including this line: <<Hufflepuff is not a house of duffers, just as Slytherin is not a house entirely peopled by monsters, no matter what the rumours may say.>> It's refreshing to NOT read a fanon stereotype. Loyalty, justice, friendship and a job well done are not "duffer" qualities. And what's wrong with ambition?
Great work! |
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