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Review(s): 9
| Reviewer: tta | Date: 2005-11-28 |
| Reviewid: 136430 | Chapter: 1 |
Very nice! I really liked seeing this scene from James' point of view and I especially liked the way you described his complicated relationship and feelings toward Lily.
The dinamics between him and Sirius were also very well done.
Off to read the sequel! :) |
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| Reviewer: Purple Eyed Weasley | Date: 2004-06-23 |
| Reviewid: 88463 | Chapter: 1 |
| this story is really realllly good. it portrays Lily, Sirius and especially James in a really perfect way. Fantastic job |
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| Reviewer: nooneyaknow | Date: 2004-06-09 |
| Reviewid: 86583 | Chapter: 1 |
| 'sounds like you's trying too hard. Relaaax... be a bit more creative-add somthing w/peter. |
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| Reviewer: Sidney | Date: 2004-06-07 |
| Reviewid: 86246 | Chapter: 1 |
| Wow, that was sooo amazing. A little short for me. But still... amazing. Great job!~!~! |
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| Reviewer: Ligia Elena | Date: 2004-06-07 |
| Reviewid: 86236 | Chapter: 1 |
| I liked the last line, the way it brought us back to where the story begins. Good job! |
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| Reviewer: Lucy P | Date: 2004-02-15 |
| Reviewid: 70886 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is such a beautifully written piece! You capture the characters perfectly. I have only one question: do you beta-read, and if so, is it possible to request you for a beta-reader? |
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| Reviewer: Monica | Date: 2004-02-15 |
| Reviewid: 70882 | Chapter: 1 |
Wow! You did a really great job with this fic...You started from a place we understood then elaborated on a point that we wonder about. I like how you tied in his feelings about Lily. I've been thinking about writing a fic that would include this scene--do you have any advice? Anyway, great job!
~Monica |
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| Reviewer: Lady Narcissa | Date: 2004-02-14 |
| Reviewid: 70678 | Chapter: 1 |
Ooh, Dominant!James. I very rarely read short pieces where he takes charge like this and shows leadership and responsibility. I've always found him a difficult character to write. You make a very precise stand with him - nicely done.
Now, Sirius... He starts out in this piece so terribly cocky and canon-like, but I felt that the characterization faded a bit. But this line is great: 'Sirius was who-knew-where, exercising a most annoying affinity for not being caught out of Gryffindor Tower after curfew.' That sounds about right to me! |
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| Reviewer: mdelaur | Date: 2004-02-14 |
| Reviewid: 70661 | Chapter: 1 |
| beautiful. short. I liked it though. Maybe make the font size a little bigger because it kind of gave me a headache. But I still enjoyed it! Keep writing! |
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