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Review(s): 17
| Reviewer: Sam | Date: 2005-04-16 |
| Reviewid: 119734 | Chapter: 1 |
| awwww, poor ickle ronniekins, sorry I couldn't resist, fab missing moment. Although I don't think a 3 year old would be asked to take the rubbish out or that Fred and George would ever be unsupervised on a broom till they were way older than 5. |
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| Reviewer: Pooca | Date: 2004-07-31 |
| Reviewid: 94965 | Chapter: 1 |
| Haha...very cute. Ron's spot on for his age, along with the others--'vaguely sinister' and 'arfitacts' were both very cute. Great job! |
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| Reviewer: Brigantia | Date: 2004-07-31 |
| Reviewid: 94827 | Chapter: 1 |
| I really like this! Everyone is a believable younger version of their canon character, and Ron's resentment is just right. |
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| Reviewer: Azyne | Date: 2004-07-30 |
| Reviewid: 94798 | Chapter: 1 |
| Haha, very well written! It makes tons of sense and would probably fit perfectly into the canon. I'm not quite sure if this is what I pictured...I think I imagined Ron just holding it, being as adorable as he is, then bursting out in tears when he realised it. Well, close enough :) |
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| Reviewer: Andrea13 | Date: 2004-07-30 |
| Reviewid: 94785 | Chapter: 1 |
"Even his face was hand-me-down" -- What a great line. You must've grown up in a large family too. ;)
Poor Ron! I just want to cuddle him at the end. That would be terrifying, and then being left WITH the bear that had just turned on him!! |
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| Reviewer: sweetie | Date: 2004-07-30 |
| Reviewid: 94760 | Chapter: 1 |
OMG! this was so sweet! i'm sitting here reading this with my sister and we're laughing our heads off at this. you've done the unthinkable, Islene: you've made me hate Fred and George! My sister thought they were funny though. Ron is adorable! WE LOVE RON! *hugs him* excellent job! thank you for finally writing a story about this part in book 2. yay!
luv sweetie and her lil sis |
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| Reviewer: sweetie | Date: 2004-07-30 |
| Reviewid: 94759 | Chapter: 1 |
OMG! this was so sweet! i'm sitting here reading this with my sister and we're laughing our heads off at this. you've done the unthinkable, Islene: you've made me hate Fred and George! My sister thought they were funny though. Ron is adorable! WE LOVE RON! *hugs him* excellent job! thank you for finally writing a story about this part in book 2. yay!
luv sweetie and her lil sis |
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| Reviewer: shooting star | Date: 2004-07-29 |
| Reviewid: 94656 | Chapter: 1 |
oh, that was very lovely- great interpretation of a missing moment, one of the best ones ive read about the little weasleys! i loved the way you described the changes in ron's perceptions of the spider before actually seeing it- cute!!! ^-^
P.S."It still looked vaguely sinister." I LOVED that line! |
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| Reviewer: Beatrice | Date: 2004-07-29 |
| Reviewid: 94632 | Chapter: 1 |
| Oh, poor little Ron! He seems so cute, although at points he seems too mature for a three-year-old. |
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| Reviewer: Frankie Beeblebrox | Date: 2004-07-29 |
| Reviewid: 94613 | Chapter: 1 |
| Awww. . . poor Ron! Nicely done, all around, though Ron seemed very mature for being three. Guess he was an early developer. :-) Loved your characterization of the twins, as well as your explanation as to how everything came about. Wonderful job! |
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| Reviewer: Deborah Peters | Date: 2004-07-29 |
| Reviewid: 94489 | Chapter: 1 |
| Lovely! I greatly enjoyed this. I especially liked the little details--such as Ron's maroon sweater (though, to Brit-pick, it ought to be jumper, though it's a small error) and the idea of Ginny putting potatoes in Percy's hair. The only off-setting thing I noticed is that Ron and the twins have rather mature diction and thought processes, though the thoughts themselves are appropriately young. Altogether, I enjoyed this story very much! |
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| Reviewer: Katja | Date: 2004-07-29 |
| Reviewid: 94479 | Chapter: 1 |
Well done! I've always wondered about this moment - I just couldn't imagine the horror of suddenly hugging a tarantula. You've captured that nicely, although it makes me shudder ^^.
The only constructive comment I can make is that Fred and George have *very* unusually good grammar and large vocabularies for five-year-olds. There's nothing wrong with that, per se, but it seemed here like it was a convenience thing (it *is* simpler to write dialogue that follows your own speech patterns) instead of a characterization thing. Just a thought.
Thanks for writing this! |
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| Reviewer: mrs_michael_m | Date: 2004-07-29 |
| Reviewid: 94463 | Chapter: 1 |
Really good, original idea for a story! Always a pleasure to read something new, especially when it so well written. Keep it up!
mrs-michael-m |
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