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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: Innocents
Review(s): 6

Reviewer: Syed HaqueDate: 2005-08-10
Reviewid: 129562Chapter: 1
The part where Dumbledore has that TOTALLY out of character outburst and almost hits Ron - that was so bad that I stopped reading the story. I'm surprised, actually; the other parts of this series aren't bad. You should keep writing but you really need to fix your characterizations.

Reviewer: SlugabedDate: 2005-02-28
Reviewid: 115184Chapter: 1
You SO do NOT deserve to be on the Professors' Bookshelf. God, it was so nasty when I had to read about the rubbery lips and the front teeth that I stopped reading it then. Or after she said she was sorry. Ugh, you make me sick. Your writing's pretty bad too. So, please, do us all a favour and stop writing - that or you can have this as a precedent for terrible writing - at least, then you'll be good for SOMETHING.

Reviewer: AnonymousDate: 2004-12-12
Reviewid: 107568Chapter: 1
I've never quite read anything with such displeasure before. I fail to recognise how you could've possibly made it to the professors' bookshelf, let alone this very website, not that I'm blaming the competence of the people who've chosen it or anything. I just don't understand. You've made the characters annoying, out-of-character, awkward, and I feel like I may have violent tendencies to these pathetic fictional beings you've created, which should easily explain the level of dislike I feel for. I feel like this story should be butchered, slaughtered and thrown out of sight.

Reviewer: CornedBeeDate: 2004-03-06
Reviewid: 73248Chapter: 1
You sure have a talent for inventing the worst-case scenarios. And you do a great job on them.

The Patronus spell is "Expecto Patronum", not "Expecto Patronem". I find Dumbledore's character very odd, completly different than in the books.

Reviewer: celestina blackDate: 2003-08-14
Reviewid: 47083Chapter: 1
i did not like this one.
it was too confusing
i didnt understand at all what any of it going on was
not the things with the bodies and the transfers, and the coming back form the dead was cheap.
i DO hope that the next one will be better.

Reviewer: SophieDate: 2003-07-27
Reviewid: 44158Chapter: 1
This is a good story but you have got Dumbledore well out of character here, he would have saved Harry, Ron, Hermione and Ginny and he wouldn't have had that outburst at the beginning. Apart from that though this is a really great story, please hurry with the sequel!

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