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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: Night
Review(s): 9

Reviewer: reader2Date: 2005-02-26
Reviewid: 114992Chapter: 1
Less gay than some

Reviewer: ArtemisaDate: 2004-10-18
Reviewid: 101750Chapter: 1
Beautiful work here, touching and sad. Do not stop writing you have a gift and it should be used. Thank you for sharing with us.

Reviewer: Pineapple QueenDate: 2004-10-12
Reviewid: 101124Chapter: 1
Wonderfully done! Loved the last line.

-PQ

Reviewer: hairy_henDate: 2004-10-07
Reviewid: 100721Chapter: 1
Wow. Very striking and poignant. I like how Remus speaks to each of his friends in turn, and then all together at the end. The part where he says he feels as though he had died long ago was particularly moving. Nicely done.

Reviewer: prplhez8Date: 2004-10-07
Reviewid: 100714Chapter: 1
Wow - I'm not ever sure where to start...

Okay small concrit..the first paragraph was a little confusing, but other than that it was wonderful.

If you could see his expression-your expression-when he smiles to his friends or when he flies, as well as you used to…
If you could just see his eyes-Lily’s eyes-and lose yourself in them and the memories they bring…
-that part had me in tears (as a mommy it's hard to watch poor little Harry sometimes).

But you actually were the first to die. You died the night you betrayed our friendship.
-That was probably the truest comment I've read about Peter yet.

I died for the second time when you died for the second time, my dear Sirius…
-OMG, OMG, OMG, wonderful.

Very, very well done.

Reviewer: Frankie B.Date: 2004-10-07
Reviewid: 100702Chapter: 1
Very nicely done. At first the slightly disjointed phrasing threw me, but then I got into the story and this is very reminiscent of a jumble of thoughts coming together at one moment. It works with your story beautifully. I really like how Remus addressed each of them in turn, even saying Peter still had a place in their hearts after all he had done. That seemed very much like something Remus would say. . . the only one of the 4 I can picture forgiving a transgression that serious. My favorite passage was the one addressed to James, though. The comparisons to James and Lily through Harry, and how Remus sees him as his last remaining link to life was handled beautifully. Very well done!

Reviewer: Friday's JesterDate: 2004-10-07
Reviewid: 100659Chapter: 1
Quite an interesting idea. Even though I think Remus is a very strong person in some respects(in my mind, i think he'd have to be), I thought the story was very moving. My only qualm is that your sentences are a bit awkward. Perhaps a more conventional aproach to structure is needed for clarity. But all and all a well thought out story!
keep writing!
-Jester

Reviewer: AmandaDate: 2004-10-07
Reviewid: 100657Chapter: 1
Very deep and intriguing. I can understand every single one of your sentences, they all speak what I thought was hidden in Remus. Very, very good story.

Reviewer: Cassie le SparrowDate: 2004-10-07
Reviewid: 100652Chapter: 1
Aw. I shouldn't have read this before bed. It's making me cry ='( It's beautiful. I love it. Great work

*grabs a Kleenex*

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