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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 6

Reviewer: reader2Date: 2005-02-13
Reviewid: 113792Chapter: 1
Diffused illumination

Reviewer: DelleveDate: 2004-11-10
Reviewid: 104197Chapter: 1
That was lovely (and rare ;) ) insight into Karkaroff's mind. You conceived emotion wonderfully (not too detailed or too simple) and I loved the lines for both Snape and Kararoff, very in character. I also liked the idea of some kids getting fake Dark Marks from muggle tattoo parlors, very interesting. Good job. :)

Reviewer: MrBenDate: 2004-11-09
Reviewid: 103985Chapter: 1
You're right, this story is well suited to first person perspective. However the story itself is a bit lacking, mainly because Karkaroff doesn't have an understanding of Snape, has no ability to push his buttons to get a reaction. Stumbling through his own ineptness in conversation, Karkaroff comes to half a conclusion; Snape will never be a DADA teacher because of his history. But nothing came from Snape, just his own half-baked theories (although it does have a logic to it). There is no sense of connection between them, even with their apparently shared approaches, goals and paths.

"Everything we had done, we did out of ignorance. Everything we shall do, we shall do out of our new-found wisdom." This seems to be the philosophy your whole fic bends towards, but it isn't backed up by the words and actions preceding. Karkaroff seems to have no comprehension of morality when he suggests they kill them all to save themselves the pain because "we were so horrible". He is no more enlightened since he stepped into the classroom, and he certainly isn't redeemed or even have the mindset to find the path to redemption.

Why should I want to know more about Karkaroff's observations when he can't even see himself?

Reviewer: potioncatDate: 2004-11-08
Reviewid: 103902Chapter: 1
What an interesting way to look at Snape and to reflect upon the days of being a Death Eater. I think this was very much in character and very believable that Severus and Igor would have had many conversations that we did not see.

Reviewer: ivy & GracieDate: 2004-11-08
Reviewid: 103891Chapter: 1
Lovely, dark and deep... We love Snape, and you've seen him through new eyes here. You have a good technical skill, too. Keep posting - we look forward to more!

Reviewer: shiningstarDate: 2004-11-07
Reviewid: 103775Chapter: 1
Interesting choice of characters to write about. I guess I'd never given much thought to Karkaroff before. You helped me see him in a whole new light. It's a great story, thanks for sharing it with us.

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