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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: Perfect
Review(s): 7

Reviewer: readerDate: 2005-01-06
Reviewid: 109914Chapter: 1
Quite nice. Thank you.

Reviewer: TraceyDate: 2004-11-29
Reviewid: 106315Chapter: 1
Oooooo...you've just set yourself up for another story to follow.

I really enjoy the way you write the Mauraders. Please keep the stories coming!

Reviewer: Carlie BlackDate: 2004-11-28
Reviewid: 106185Chapter: 1
Great story! I think you capture all the marauders personalities perfectly. You make then seem all very real, with faults, but still lovable characters

i like how in the story you alluded to Peter being interested in what Voldemort and the Dark side thought. As well as the idea of James and Sirius thinking Remus was the spy (i loved james's reaction to seeing remus reading the book) and not telling him about the secret keeper switch

and off course i loved the perfection theme. i hope you continue to do these one shots about MWPP!

Reviewer: The CorinthianDate: 2004-11-25
Reviewid: 105986Chapter: 1
"Enemies of Blood by Voldemort" Mein Kampf much? Never thought of Voldemort as the intellectual take-over type

Reviewer: KatieDate: 2004-11-24
Reviewid: 105796Chapter: 1
Very good! I love how you portray the Marauders, very realistic. Please, please, please, please, keep writing these stories!

Reviewer: WendelinDate: 2004-11-23
Reviewid: 105713Chapter: 1
It's been a long time since I read any Marauder-era fics; I seem to be a bit cursed when it comes to those, because every time I pluck up the courage to read one, it turns out to be howlingly bad. (One, memorably, was about how James harboured a crush on each of the other three in turn before settling for Lily as a last resort.)

But you, my dear Abigail, work magic with this fic - and my curse seems to have lifted, finally. Your marauders are better characterised than any I've ever seen, and your writing style is straightforward, effortless, and completely lacking in melodrama and sentimentality - so much like Rowling's, in fact, that I was immediately drawn into it, willing to believe that this story *belonged* in Official Potterverse.

I even like Regina and her interactions with James (and the way she *non*-interacts with Moony). Not only does she contribute beautifully to the 'Perfection' theme of the story, she also feels like an authentic part of the story and the HP universe - which is more than I can say for most OCs. And I'm calling her an OC in spite of the fact that she's a character with little screentime (mostly, the main characters use her to make conversation and bounce off) tells you how real she seems to me - a major achievement in such a short piece.

I also like how no earth-shatteringly zinging thing happens in this story, but you manage to convey a sense of change in the characters and achieve a closure that feels important to them nevertheless. Not to belittle you by comparing you to another fanfic writer, but this is what Elsha's fics do... and I think she's really, really good.

And so are you. I'm sorry I haven't read your fics before, but I'm going to correct that immediately.

Keep writing, and thanks for sharing this!

Reviewer: KateDate: 2004-11-23
Reviewid: 105641Chapter: 1
I really liked this story. I thought it was a very good one shot. I especially liked how you didn't automatically make Peter the bad guy. I liked how you gave clues to how he was leaning and his curiosity, but he was still very much a part of the group. One of the better MWPP fics I've read, I thought you captured them very well.

Thanks.

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