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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: Following The Rules
Review(s): 7

Reviewer: Reader 2Date: 2006-02-20
Reviewid: 140081Chapter: 1
Funny – Well done.

Reviewer: Violet AzureDate: 2005-03-11
Reviewid: 116195Chapter: 1
[The debris was gone and her daily ritual of a Knut for the children at St. Mungo's (and for luck) couldn't be performed.] I liked how you gave Dolores a bit of a human side there and we get a glimpse that she might not be all that bad. It's really hard to make Umbridge look sympathetic. Even Voldemort is a more sympathetic character than her.

[That none of them died is quite astonishing, considering their grades in Defense Against the Dark Arts.] *snert*

[I must say, if these so-called followers of He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Names are so weak as to be overcome by a band of half-trained - and badly at that - students, we truly have little to fear."] Hmmmm, good point!

You really captured how Doloer's mind works. Great job getting inside her head. The ending is a little abrupt and Fudge seems awfully calm for someone who has just been proven wrong in a big way, but overall this was a nice epilogue as to the fate of Dolores Umbridge.

Reviewer: Morag CamshronDate: 2005-01-03
Reviewid: 109640Chapter: 1
I think Fudge would either do something like this or cast her off like an old shoe in an attempt to regain public popularity; the man is really pathetic. The bit about Dolores getting a new wand when she joined the Ministry because her old one was “hopelessly adolescent” along with Mr Ollivander’s polite refusal to provide her with a new wand ordered to her specifications was really well done— it’s just so HER. The only criticism that I have to offer is that you spelled Dolores incorrectly at a point in your story (you wrote Delores). On the other hand, the subtle reference to Umbridge’s prejudice against Squibs was great— I can easily see her extending her horrid prejudices to Squibs.

- Morag Camshron

Reviewer: MrRobertsIIIDate: 2005-01-03
Reviewid: 109600Chapter: 1
Sigh, this rings very true. I could just see Fudge welcoming her back with open arms.

No, Dolores," Fudge picked up a quill and dipped it. "What was that again? I think it would do admirably as a statement for the Daily Prophet in the morning."
-what a fool. Nicely done.

Reviewer: AnnieDate: 2004-12-27
Reviewid: 108742Chapter: 1
I loved this. Keep up the good work. After the last sentence I wanted to say "Don!!Don!! Don!!"

Reviewer: emma moonDate: 2004-12-26
Reviewid: 108622Chapter: 1
Bravo! Excellent story! You have Umbridge down to a "T"! I loved it!

Reviewer: Barbara the Wallpaper-erDate: 2004-12-25
Reviewid: 108603Chapter: 1
*shudder*

I'm not sure whether to congratulate you on successfully getting inside Umbridge's head... or not. You've certainly made her actions plausible and possible, from her point of view, and her manipulation/control of the Minister believable.

Well written!

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