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Review(s): 40
| Reviewer: Wolf's Scream | Date: 2006-07-07 |
| Reviewid: 144007 | Chapter: 13 |
Hmm... tension still rising.... Not quite sure why Ginny wouldn't have walked -- or Apparated -- away from Draco: Surely there was nothing he had to say that she would find useful or helpful. (She need not Apparate far -- just out of sight of Draco....)
Not quite sure about the use of "spurious" (in "Dumbledore's spurious death") -- I'm having trouble understanding what you meant by that. And please don't use apostrophes to make plural forms, OK? :-) [I.e., the plural of "Malfoy" would be "Malfoys," not "Malfoy's." "Malfoy's" would be a singular possessive; "Malfoys'" would be a plural possessive.]
Story's still good despite that, though. :-) |
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| Reviewer: Amick_woods | Date: 2006-05-03 |
| Reviewid: 142499 | Chapter: 12 |
| It's fabulous! I really like it, it's a great way to show what happened after book seven, especially because it's not all wonderful, and the effects of the war are still visible in everyone. It could still use a tiny bit of editing, but only in terms of grammar and punctuation, and only a little bit! I wait excitedly for chapter 13! |
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| Reviewer: firebolt dustpan | Date: 2006-03-09 |
| Reviewid: 140750 | Chapter: 1 |
| Unlike everyone else, I have had no problems with formatting and I enjoy your "Americanisms" very much. However, I do have one problem that I need to address with you. Why are you just now gracing us with your creative and very well thought out writing abilities? I love this story and I'm a 27 yr old man. Thank you for taking the time to write and I look forward to future stories! |
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| Reviewer: Samantha C-* | Date: 2006-03-06 |
| Reviewid: 140596 | Chapter: 1 |
Hey,
wow ur story is amazing!!!
i love it and cant wait to here wats happining next!!!
I jus singed up to sugarquill just a few minutes ago after reading After the end ( great story btw u should read it)so this is only the 2nd story ive read and its awesome cant wait 2 c wats nxt
C-* |
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| Reviewer: Wolf's Scream | Date: 2006-02-25 |
| Reviewid: 140272 | Chapter: 11 |
Hmmm... I guess the "gaggle of girls" *didn't* notice that Ginny was the same -- or didn't care (though a reasonably clever person probably would have wondered, at least). Ah, well -- I suppose the young ladies in question weren't brought into the story to challenge Hermione's intellect, eh? :-)
And the rest of the chapter was good, too, in case you wondered. :-} |
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| Reviewer: birdsong | Date: 2006-01-13 |
| Reviewid: 138464 | Chapter: 10 |
| (To read easily, I clicked on the story then went to Edit - Select All. Then I went to Word, Edit, Paste Special, Unformatted Text - and it was fine.) I love this story! You've done a great job of intertwining each character's thoughts and fears. Well done! You've captured each one's character and how they would act in this situation. I can hardly wait for your next chapter!!! |
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| Reviewer: Wolf's Scream | Date: 2006-01-11 |
| Reviewid: 138343 | Chapter: 10 |
Very well written; Ginny's flashback is rather blood-curdling.
Something's gone rather wonky with the formatting for this chapter & the previous one, though --
some of the lines are about 5 times as long as the window is wide, and the text isn't wrapping,
so I'm needing to do horizontal scrolling back & forth in order to read the story. (Would have
mentioned it earlier, but I just got my laptop back a few hours ago.) |
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| Reviewer: Elaina Riddle | Date: 2006-01-10 |
| Reviewid: 138310 | Chapter: 9 |
| Sorry about the format. I've put in an inquiry, as to if it can be fixed. =D |
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| Reviewer: lemonaide | Date: 2006-01-10 |
| Reviewid: 138299 | Chapter: 10 |
| I am enjoying the story.. except you need to fix the formating. It is making it hard to enjoy the story. I use Safari and get a really really wide window, and paragraphs that are incorrectly formated. It makes it very hard to read. The html needs to be fixed. |
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| Reviewer: alphie | Date: 2006-01-10 |
| Reviewid: 138292 | Chapter: 9 |
| This chapter posted in a very odd html. You'll want to contact someone at the site and ask them to try to fix it. |
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| Reviewer: Darker_Rage | Date: 2005-11-16 |
| Reviewid: 135938 | Chapter: 8 |
This is great stuff! *is addicted to angst.* I love the way this is developing. I do have one small problem, you're using an awful lot of americanisms - things like "write me," "bummed" and the like. Despite this, the story is good, and I eagerly await your next update
D_R |
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| Reviewer: Maddy | Date: 2005-10-30 |
| Reviewid: 135437 | Chapter: 8 |
| Thanks for the great story...I hope for more chapters but if not i still like this ending..Keep up the good writing! |
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| Reviewer: childoftheseventhsin | Date: 2005-10-29 |
| Reviewid: 135351 | Chapter: 8 |
| Aw, this fic is so cute! I love anything Ginny and Harry related . . . . hehehe |
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| Reviewer: David Wolfskill | Date: 2005-10-29 |
| Reviewid: 135343 | Chapter: 8 |
| Hmmmm... so Harry & Ginny might have some hope after all ... maybe ...? I look forward to the next chapter! |
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| Reviewer: beck | Date: 2005-10-28 |
| Reviewid: 135330 | Chapter: 8 |
| I had to completely reread this whole story cause i havent read it in so long and i forgot how much i liked it cant wait for the update please update soon |
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| Reviewer: godricshollow | Date: 2005-10-28 |
| Reviewid: 135277 | Chapter: 8 |
Hi!
I just read through your story... it's great! I'm loving it and can't wait to find out if there's a double meaning in the whole "you're going to knock him dead" quote. Morbid, I know, but I always catch those little things. ANYWAY! ha ha. I'm writing my term paper on fan fiction (awesome, eh?) and I was wondering if I could interview you. E-mail me at hennypenny465@hotmail.com. I'd love to hear from you! |
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| Reviewer: shazia | Date: 2005-08-31 |
| Reviewid: 131376 | Chapter: 7 |
| nooooooooooooo! how could u leave it in suspense? pleez write more soon. i'm dying here! |
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| Reviewer: Kristine | Date: 2005-07-09 |
| Reviewid: 126604 | Chapter: 5 |
| Nice start! I love this story so far. I hope everything works out! It's terrible how Voldermort used Ginny. |
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| Reviewer: Arianna | Date: 2005-07-08 |
| Reviewid: 126553 | Chapter: 5 |
| I love this story, it's so dynamic. I am assuming that this won't be done before HBP, so please continue it afterwards, even if it becomes AU. |
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| Reviewer: Jaclyn | Date: 2005-04-25 |
| Reviewid: 120593 | Chapter: 3 |
| Hmm.. you've got my interest. I like how harry and ginny still haven't hooked up, I never imagined he'd hook up at hogworts, thers just to much voldemort on his mind, plus he's not so much the ladies man. I also like how you managed to have the trio stay together, just like normal, even though hermionne and ron are together. Finally I like how you keep changing perspectives, it makes the story alot more personal. |
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| Reviewer: Lindsay | Date: 2005-04-23 |
| Reviewid: 120419 | Chapter: 3 |
wow, your story is really good, i can't wait for the nxt 1!! keep em comin!!!!! i like this version alot!!!
luv daniel radcliff lover lindsay |
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| Reviewer: James | Date: 2005-02-21 |
| Reviewid: 114593 | Chapter: 2 |
| Please keep writing! You have me intrigued. Its very well written and you've done a great job of capturing the characters.. so to speak! |
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| Reviewer: Mary | Date: 2005-02-17 |
| Reviewid: 114138 | Chapter: 2 |
| I like where this is going....I hope you udate soon. One thing though- Ginny best friends with Colin, as in Colin Creevy?? If it is Colin Creevy, I think he is a bit annoying for her temperment, but that is just my opinion. Other than that, I think this is really well written. I can't wait for the next installment!!! |
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| Reviewer: Rosie | Date: 2005-01-13 |
| Reviewid: 110760 | Chapter: 1 |
| I like the idea of the trio getting a home together. Hopefully there's room for Ginny for after Hogwarts! |
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| Reviewer: Chapolina | Date: 2005-01-13 |
| Reviewid: 110759 | Chapter: 1 |
| I like the few details you gave of the final war, and you're right. I'm dying to know how the Deatheaters got onto the Hogwarts grounds. |
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| Reviewer: Duck | Date: 2005-01-12 |
| Reviewid: 110654 | Chapter: 1 |
| Great start! I'm already hooked! Please write more soon! Please! Go, hurry and write! |
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| Reviewer: mal | Date: 2005-01-12 |
| Reviewid: 110638 | Chapter: 1 |
nice start! I like it so far. now hurry up with the rest of it.. You made me very curious with your storys summary.
keep it up! |
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| Reviewer: Gillian | Date: 2005-01-12 |
| Reviewid: 110619 | Chapter: 1 |
| Interesting start! LoL Poor Harry being teased by Ron and Hermione, well I'm sure he still gets his fair share in! Post some more soon! |
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