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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 7

Reviewer: Reader 2Date: 2005-10-03
Reviewid: 133640Chapter: 1
Nice

Reviewer: Fresh_AngelBabeDate: 2005-04-17
Reviewid: 119782Chapter: 1
That was really good! It had just the right blend of conversation and explanation.

Reviewer: SeasprayDate: 2005-02-19
Reviewid: 114375Chapter: 1
This is very good. Very interesting and complex- I like your interpretation of light and dark magic - I liked how you used Polyjuice potion as an example- something that can be used for evil as we know and yet which isn't evil in itself... Or is it?

Septimia is an interesting character- she seems very wise and patient although I'm not sure I entirely trust her either. And, again your characterisation of the boy Severus was admirable:
<“Yes. The pictures were nice – there was one of a man with his head inside out.>
So very like a young child! And yet I can veery much see the seeds of the man he will become, in his eagerness for books and the forbidden, and his longing to curse his teacher....
His mothers last words were perfect though- very good advice- a pity he doesn't follow it. Although perhaps when she "abandoned" him he felt less inclined to? This is very good.. you really have the psychology of these characters nailed.

Reviewer: AdrienneDate: 2005-01-14
Reviewid: 110864Chapter: 1
Holy God. That was good. What she says at the very end is so succinct, on par with everything else... we don't even need the years between this event and the present Snape seen in canon to see why behaves the way he does. EXCELLENT character analysis and an oddly relevant piece given the situation of the United States "good guys" vs. Muslim "terrorists." Thank you.

Reviewer: StarseaDate: 2005-01-13
Reviewid: 110761Chapter: 1
What a beautiful and thoughtful story. I loved the description of Severus as a little boy, before whatever happened to warp his family occurred. Septimia is an intriguing character, I'd like to read more about her. Her explanations were intelligent and she did not talk down to her son, but I could see flashes of the Snape we know in her. Faustina... nice little nod to literature, very much in Rowling's style.

Two observations: I don't think that Septimia would say "Bambi eyes" if she's a pureblood, because that is Muggle culture; maybe "mooncalf eyes" would be better? And secondly, 'do not get me wrong' just doesn't sound right. ^^;; Perhaps 'don't/do not misunderstand me' instead? Just my personal opinion.

Favourite part:

"Much of the Dark Arts’ appeal stems from the fact that you are constantly confronting yourself, paying the toll and reaping the rewards for your own actions.

“Now, do you still wish to study Dark magic?”

“Yes, Mother.”

It's typical of Snape that he'd still want to try, ambitious little Slytherin that he is. I look forward to reading more of your stories!

xxx~Starsea~xxx

Reviewer: srutiDate: 2005-01-12
Reviewid: 110708Chapter: 1
sounds very beautiful-i loved the explaination i could hear her voice-calm and smooth and full of mystery

Reviewer: AnimusDate: 2005-01-12
Reviewid: 110627Chapter: 1
Hey,

This was a very interesting story, giving your answer to the very intriguing question of what are the Dark Arts. Your answer was very good, and I agree with most of it.

The way you presented it was very good and understandable, and that last phrase Septimia said was a nice way to finish the story.

Keep up the good work.

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