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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 6

Reviewer: Hpgirl42095Date: 2006-02-14
Reviewid: 139812Chapter: 1
Awww....the ending is very sweet....i can't imagine what regulus is feeling. :(

Reviewer: MargeauDate: 2005-03-06
Reviewid: 115701Chapter: 1
Wow this is a great story! It all fits! It's perfect!

- Margeau -

Reviewer: DarcelDate: 2005-03-06
Reviewid: 115659Chapter: 1
I felt it was a bit rushed in places, for instance "“I said that I’m engaged to a Muggleborn, mother,” she answered, sitting very straight. Her mother gave a cry and fainted.



“How dare you, young lady!” her father bellowed. “After all we have taught you, after all we have done for you! From now on, you are not a Black. I don’t know you. Get out of this house now!”"

I think that scene would have been better if the reactions of the people around Andromeda were written about, beyond that they went silent. Otherwise, I enjoyed the story.

Reviewer: magicaljulesDate: 2005-03-05
Reviewid: 115577Chapter: 1
Laura,

You did a great job with the Black family! It's saddening to know what would happen to all of them later. So arrogant in their beliefs, and now they have almost all died out. You also did a wonderful job making Sirius feel bittersweet about his family. He wishes he could love them, but he knows he has to leave.

Which is what makes this line so moving: >>It felt like a bullet had been removed from his body. It had caused pain and frustration while being there but it left a big gap when gone.<<

Good work, SQ Little Sis!

:wub:,

Jules

Reviewer: reader2Date: 2005-03-05
Reviewid: 115563Chapter: 1
Good tale. Best of Sirius leaving fics, so far.

Reviewer: GenesseDate: 2005-03-05
Reviewid: 115546Chapter: 1
I am so pleased to be a part of the dedication! I love the Black family and I love stories about the Black family. You had some very good details in this story, and of course I'm very glad that you put in the last few sentences about Regulus in shock and pain because Sirius is leaving.

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