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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 4

Reviewer: Reader 2Date: 2006-04-30
Reviewid: 142391Chapter: 5
A most excellent ending to a very good story. Thank you.

Reviewer: Violet AzureDate: 2005-06-04
Reviewid: 123312Chapter: 2
Great chapter. I love the interplay between Severus and Viviane. You get this real sense that they know each other intimately, that they know each other's personalities and how the other thinks. There's a lot of bittersweetness in this piece and it really feels like I've eavesdropping on two former lovers who are getting some closure with each other. I also like how you hint at what happened with the war and the reasons behind their dissolution, but you leave a little mystery and a little to the imagination. I like it when authors are able to show that sort of restraint, and yet still tell the reader enough so that the reader doesn't get lost. Again, the descriptions of Prague are so evocative and so full of the little details that matter. After reading what Severus and Viviane were eating for dinner, the turkey and Swiss sandwich I was eating for lunch became a lot less appealing! Great chapter.

Reviewer: Violet AzureDate: 2005-05-28
Reviewid: 122941Chapter: 1
[I suspected that the death of Sirius, instead of breaking him, set him free of a millstone he would never admit bearing.]

Wow, great psychological insight to the characters. I love the opening, the prose is just gorgeous. There's this sense of both destruction and hope; a sort of regrouping and regathering but not necessarily rebuilding the same thing that existed in the past.

[She had most amusingly chosen a hotel... had been a 13th century convent.]

I love little details like that, they make the story so rich. I also think it's very fitting that the hotel used to be a convent, not just because of the iront but because lots of great and powerful women through the ages "retired" to convents once they were widowed and near the end of their lives.

[it even smelled like autumn, despite my being in a city; wood smoke and dying leaves mingled with exhaust and stale paprika.]

Gorgeous description. Even though I've never been to Prague, I feel like I have. Only a great writer can make a reader experience a place they have never been.

I'm so happy you're giving closure to Viviane's story. I really like the somber tone of this one, reminds me more of "The Witch and the Werewolf." So excited to see that there are more chapters posted. This was certainly a pleasant surprise to see posted!

Reviewer: MerryDate: 2005-05-28
Reviewid: 122919Chapter: 5
I scarcely ever comment, but you've pulled me out of my lurking. It's your use of language that is so astonishing and-- well, right. Vivid as an oil painting, subtle as a watercolor. You've got Prague all right. Yes, you've got Prague. You could look at my photo albums without getting as good a sense of that city as you do from this story. And it was the perfect-- perhaps the only-- city the story could possibly have taken place in.

How does it feel to have gotten something so right? Is it 'like God on the seventh day'?

Thanks for yet another great read.

~Merry

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