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Review(s): 4
| Reviewer: mary ellis | Date: 2006-03-05 |
| Reviewid: 140563 | Chapter: 4 |
I'm pleasurably chilled by this story. Engaging characters limned by dialog and gestures, spare, clipped phrasing, the use of the present tense (though there seem to be a few errors when you lapse into the perfect tenses--but enhh, not a big deal).
The plot is engaging, and I love seeing new characters contributed to the Magicosm--especially women with their own agendas and not just tied to some man. Write on, oh Winky! |
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| Reviewer: Falling Damps | Date: 2006-01-28 |
| Reviewid: 138992 | Chapter: 1 |
Your use of the present tense here is very effective in making us, your readers, live in the moment - gives a sense of the urgency and immediate-ness, if you will. I like it!
Creative plot, definitely catching my interest. Keep it up! |
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| Reviewer: citysnidget | Date: 2005-12-13 |
| Reviewid: 137086 | Chapter: 1 |
| wow...very well written, lots of suspense. i especially like your characterization of Dumbledore. It's very believable. |
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| Reviewer: Lorie | Date: 2005-06-14 |
| Reviewid: 123979 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is quite a beginning! Your use of the present tense gives it a certain urgency, a feeling of events happening NOW, that is perfect for, and adds to, the tone you have set. The original characters show plenty of promise. Great reading of Dumbledore's eccentric manners, too. I am anxiously anticipating more! |
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