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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 5

Reviewer: wendelin_the_weirdDate: 2005-12-12
Reviewid: 137072Chapter: 1
I loved it. What Snape wants most is Lily's forgivenes... this desire of his fits with both the Snape-is-evil and Snape-is-good theories, if you believe in Snape-loved-Lily, which I do. :)

More to the point, this was very well-written. The narrative carried me along effortlessly, through the shocks and surprises and twists. (Snape wants to be headmaster! Who would guess? He hates the little bleeders!)

There is something slightly overreaching about Dumbledore's deepest desire (world peace... meh!) in an oversimplified sort of way, but hey, he's Dumbledore. I suppose he *can* carry it off.

But I do like how it's Snape and Harry shaking hands that is the foreground for Dumbledore's fantasy.. It's so telling that it's not Snape and James or Sirius, for example.

Reviewer: Reader 2Date: 2005-12-12
Reviewid: 137064Chapter: 1
An odd take.

Reviewer: LadyCrowDate: 2005-11-15
Reviewid: 135912Chapter: 1
Damn good 1st story, Stellar Hawk. It brings up the always perplexing statement: "If only..." (something which we've all asked ourselves @ some point), and it took my breath away...

Pax,
LC

Reviewer: smudgedinkDate: 2005-11-15
Reviewid: 135895Chapter: 1
All I can say is, 'wow...' This is wonderful. Your descriptions of the fight with the Marauders, Snape's love for Lily, and the scene at Godric's Hollow were so well-written. I like your view of Snape and his reasoning for hating Harry Potter.

One thing, though, that didn't sit right with me was Sirius's suggestion that they use the Cruciatus Curse. I don't think he's the kind of person who would do that. I mean, I know Harry had tried to use it on Bellatrix, but then again, he had just witnessed the death of his godfather and his anger was so great - it was not justified, but understandable (I guess that's the word I'm looking for). Ah well, agree to disagree. :) Good job!

Reviewer: SanctionDate: 2005-11-15
Reviewid: 135887Chapter: 1
This is a powerful and well-constructed piece of work. It works primarily because you have a firm grasp of Snape's character and establish it from the very beginning. I have some problems with Snape's lines at the critical moment he's confronting baby Harry--I think they would have been better not spoken--but otherwise, your narration and style is crisp and clear and a joy to read. An excellent first story for the Quill.

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