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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: The Long Road Ahead
Review(s): 7

Reviewer: Reader 2Date: 2005-12-12
Reviewid: 137059Chapter: 1
A journey may begin by placing one foot forward, but that does not a story make.

Reviewer: shanfawn16Date: 2005-11-24
Reviewid: 136250Chapter: 1
Thanks to all who reviewed! It meant alot to me to know that you liked my first fic! You're all the best!

Reviewer: HarmoniousDate: 2005-11-18
Reviewid: 135986Chapter: 1
This is the first fanfic I've read that actually deals with Hermione and how her parents are taking all of what is happening. I like what you have done.

I hope you will add more to this. If you do, I look forward to seeing where you take this.

-----Miriam

Reviewer: witchy-witchDate: 2005-11-17
Reviewid: 135973Chapter: 1
That was nice and sweet and truthful. It was probably what would happen. or what will happen...because you can't exactly expect that her parents will be all: "What's that dear? Oh, ok, do well in defeating that darkest wizard of all times. Oh yes, please bring back a pineapple for lunch!" I mean, there dentists! And, you described the action perfectly. Not the buying of the pineapple of course!

Reviewer: Author by NightDate: 2005-11-17
Reviewid: 135961Chapter: 1
The second I read the last paragraph, I let out a loud "oh!" that probably woke up half the neighborhood.

I feel bad for Hermione's parents. It must be hard - losing a child and knowing you're ultimately defenseless, at least compared to her.

Very good - keep it up!

Reviewer: YlimeDate: 2005-11-17
Reviewid: 135960Chapter: 1
I really enjoyed this. A beautifully captured little moment of time, and Hermione was so perfectly characterised.

My favourite line was without doubt this:

“Well, I guess you’ll just have to show this Voldemort why you’re the cleverest witch of your age,” her mother said.

I love how she refers to him as "this Voldemort" - made me grin. But it's also such motherly pride showing there - perfect.

Thanks for a fantastic story - welcome to the Quill! :)

Reviewer: Ardie BeaDate: 2005-11-17
Reviewid: 135958Chapter: 1
Good stuff.
Brave of you to carry the story forward again and risk canon-balling - though this is a very likely canon-proof scene. I like your straight-talking Hermione "Hermione suddenly stood and met her mother’s glare. “First of all, Harry is not just some boy. He’s one of my best friends, and he’s saved my life more than once. But, besides that, you are right, Mum. It is enough."
I can see that vividly. Really clear and strong and totally Hermione.
"Why can’t someone older, with more experience do this?”
“I’m of age in the wizarding community,” Hermione responded calmly, “and in a couple of months I’ll be of age here, too. As for experience, Harry has more experience facing Voldemort than anyone else, ever. And, Ron and I have been there with him most of the way."
Good point. It needs reinforcing for all of us over the age of 16 who can't bear the thought of three children heading into the wilderness to face ultimate evil!
"With love and faith, the Light side will win.”
Heading towards twee here. The love and the faith is portrayed in everything else that Hermione is saying - I don't think you need to make it explicit here.
The last three paragraphs are excellent. The 'soft pop' of departure gives a good clear feeling of the sadness and the finality of Hermione's decisions. I'd happily read more.

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