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Review(s): 13
| Reviewer: Magicdust | Date: 2006-02-20 |
| Reviewid: 140110 | Chapter: 1 |
Nice work.You took an idea and ran with it. It sounded good except for some fine tuning:
You had some grammer issues though. There are some places where you missed some quotations, commas instead of periods (or vice versa) Also,try and put some more imagery.
Other than that, nice work!
Cheers-
*Magic* |
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| Reviewer: Frivolous Pink | Date: 2005-12-28 |
| Reviewid: 137755 | Chapter: 1 |
| You have a nice ear for dialogue! This really sounds like Ron. Which is a huge compliment, because everybody loves the way Ron talks. |
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| Reviewer: Dot Keet | Date: 2005-12-18 |
| Reviewid: 137350 | Chapter: 1 |
| Good characterization. However, I think the cursing is actually unnecessary. It's not really Ron-like to swear in such a mild situation. Your work would be more respectable without it! :-) |
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| Reviewer: PrettyPixie | Date: 2005-12-18 |
| Reviewid: 137343 | Chapter: 1 |
| It's me, PP again. I would just like to let everyone know that I am looking to co-write a story. Please email me: Babygurl13573@aol.com |
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| Reviewer: pythonblossom | Date: 2005-11-19 |
| Reviewid: 136005 | Chapter: 1 |
It's a nice fic but ...
the summary says 'Harry and Ron discuss', but the fic only shows Ron and Ginny's conversation. So I am feeling cheated *pouts* |
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| Reviewer: Poppy P | Date: 2005-11-18 |
| Reviewid: 135978 | Chapter: 1 |
| Brief, but good missing time moment. I like how perceptive Ginny is compared to clueless Ron. Great job! |
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| Reviewer: PrettyPixie | Date: 2005-11-17 |
| Reviewid: 135976 | Chapter: 1 |
| I had so much fun writing this story. I am so glad that it got published. I am so happy. |
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| Reviewer: birdsong | Date: 2005-11-17 |
| Reviewid: 135956 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is a good short story. Good job for your first try! I think you captured Ron's feelings. |
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