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| Reviewer: Hpgirl42095 | Date: 2006-04-16 |
| Reviewid: 141955 | Chapter: 6 |
One word: Wow. I've never read anything like it!
P.S- Grr, I hate cliffhangers! LOL |
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| Reviewer: mary ellis | Date: 2006-02-04 |
| Reviewid: 139317 | Chapter: 5 |
| You have some really interesting ideas here and a gift for writing conversation. The mirror as a vehicle for AU is first-rate. But I'd like to see you take each wish and make it into a full-blown story. The reason is that all the explanations you have to jam into the dialog at the end of each chapter turns your delightful gift into nothing more than a news article, just fact after fact. And even though the revelations themselves are satisfying, the reportorial style reads a bit like a Professor Binns lecture. |
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| Reviewer: mary ellis | Date: 2006-02-04 |
| Reviewid: 139316 | Chapter: 3 |
| I adore Brianna and I love the Fleur-as-Veela-scorned story. But Ron's explanations and word choices are rather too mature for a three-year-old, don't you think? (Yes, I know--she's Percy's daughter--but still..._ |
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| Reviewer: Verin | Date: 2006-02-01 |
| Reviewid: 139141 | Chapter: 5 |
| Well written, feeling sorry for Hermione that her soulmate has been...reshuffled, so to say. But I'm wondering about your version of Sirius. The major change via the mirror is that Gideon and Fabian were still alive, and therefore able to come to the Potters' rescue. But if James survived, then so would have the information that Sirius was innocent, that Peter had tried to frame Sirius. So how come everyone still thinks Sirius is guilty? Are you saying that in this alternate universe Sirius really DID go bad, and that Peter was good? Because G and F lived? Don't see how the two matters would be related... |
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