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Review(s): 7
| Reviewer: Ginny Lover | Date: 2006-09-14 |
| Reviewid: 145331 | Chapter: 1 |
| Love your writing.... All of your stories move and captivate me. This one maybe the most.... Awesome work, keep the unbelievable writing. |
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| Reviewer: Weaselsu | Date: 2006-02-11 |
| Reviewid: 139648 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is great! I don't think Ron is out of character. Everyone had been hoping Harry and Giny would get together for a while so he's had time to think it through and when they finally do he's just relieved and happy! Good job! XXXOOO |
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| Reviewer: Adele | Date: 2005-12-22 |
| Reviewid: 137537 | Chapter: 1 |
| I agree with the first reviewer that it was a little dramatic, and that Ron's comments toward the end were rather out of character. But otherwise, it was a good first piece. You did a nice job capturing both Harry's and Ginny's view of one another. I hope you continue your hobby and build your skills - you're on your way, I can see! |
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| Reviewer: PrettyPixie | Date: 2005-12-18 |
| Reviewid: 137340 | Chapter: 1 |
| Hmmmmmmm, nice for a first try. i love the description if everything. I think you captured both Ginny's and Harry's feelings perfectly. But from your writing style I can tell that you should keep on writing short storys. I dont think you'd be very good at long ones. |
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| Reviewer: Magicdust | Date: 2005-12-17 |
| Reviewid: 137302 | Chapter: 1 |
I LOVED IT!DO YOU HEAR ME!That was aweomse.....SEQUEL!Please.....!
Cheers
Magicdust |
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| Reviewer: Mansoor Haque | Date: 2005-12-17 |
| Reviewid: 137292 | Chapter: 1 |
Well, it's good, but slightly on the melodramatic side. The "healing" magic thing is a good idea.
Your writing, especially the inner dialogue and description, is superb. Just improve the spoken dialouge (like Ron's comments near the end - I don't think he'd talk like that) to make it more believeable and you'll have an excellent story on your hands |
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