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Review(s): 7
| Reviewer: dogstar | Date: 2006-01-14 |
| Reviewid: 138499 | Chapter: 1 |
This is so good. Very complete and beautifully detailed story. The old-fashioned Yorkshire dialect could easily become heavy-handed and crass but it's so consistent that it works. I was reminded of Mrs Medlock in The Secret Garden but yours is more authentic!
Great characterisation of the future Marauders - they really were loathsome weren't they? Let's blame them for everything ... well, 87% perhaps ... |
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| Reviewer: Angelina Weasley | Date: 2006-01-12 |
| Reviewid: 138371 | Chapter: 1 |
Wow. I love it. When I read Sev's first piece of diolouge, I was taken aback. This is not the Snape we know! I said to myself.
But then, of course, we figure out how he earns his Snapeish voice and all.
I love little Snape, and how even he needs to cuddle Ramsbottom. I thought that was especially cute.
I think I might have to make a toy snake.
Great story, I hope you write more!
-Angelina Weasley |
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| Reviewer: PirateQueen | Date: 2006-01-10 |
| Reviewid: 138311 | Chapter: 1 |
Wonderful story - both bittersweet and very funny, it highlights the sad way that children often feel forced to conform.
And I'm old enough to be able to laugh at the British in-jokes, too ... ;-) |
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| Reviewer: Seaspray | Date: 2006-01-10 |
| Reviewid: 138308 | Chapter: 1 |
| Oh, I can definitely see Severus doing this. Poor kid. I love Sirius, but sometimes he really was a prat. I liked how you incorporated Sooty (I love that show...er, I mean *used* to love that show, of course) and all that Yorkshire talk. The incident on the train was a very believeable beginning to the Snape/ Marauder enmity. It's a pity Sirius was so insensitive, things really could have been different *sighs*. You write wonderfully and your characterisation is flawless. Good job! |
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| Reviewer: Unspeakable | Date: 2006-01-09 |
| Reviewid: 138259 | Chapter: 1 |
| Azazello, your interpretation of Severus' life is again so true both to the character and the real life in Britain. Actually, a British writer living in Finland has told about similar events in his youth. His home was somewhere in Northern England (Yorkshire perhaps). Because he was a very bright child who did very well at the primary school, he got a scholarship to a posh boarding school. He had to re-invent himself linguistically and adopt a more educated accent, the Received Pronunciation. He simply couldn't go on speaking his native dialect. I think the way you handle Severus' feelings and decisions is really great! |
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| Reviewer: VJA | Date: 2006-01-08 |
| Reviewid: 138197 | Chapter: 1 |
Clever and funny and sad all at once. I've had far too many problems with my own accent to find it laugh-out-loud hilarious, but it was wryly amusing to see Sirius get a sort of comeuppance and little Severus gaining the upper hand for once.
And you're absolutely right; the shipping forecast is wonderful. |
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