|
| Dumbledore's
Army |
|
|
|
Review(s): 4
| Reviewer: marauder4ever | Date: 2006-03-13 |
| Reviewid: 140904 | Chapter: 1 |
| Cool story!I am going to read it one more time before properly posting.I need to read a story at least twice before catching everything because I read so fast. |
| Report possible abuse to a moderator |
| Reviewer: Iseult | Date: 2006-02-23 |
| Reviewid: 140198 | Chapter: 1 |
| Very enjoyable. A great take on what Draco did next. I am quite sure he will survive but putting him into Lupin's shoes as a werewolf was a great idea. |
| Report possible abuse to a moderator |
| Reviewer: dzennka | Date: 2006-02-16 |
| Reviewid: 139882 | Chapter: 1 |
| I'm going to reread again and then review properly, but there was just one very minor thing that slightly hindered my comprehension the first time through. It wasn't clear to me that the oooooooo was supposed to be a scene divider. I thought it was a creaky door/spooky ghost sort of noise, and didn't understand why they were suddenly making tea in the kitchen of this house they were spying on etc. So now I'm going to reread it with knowledge that oooo signifies a scene change, but you might want to use something else, like asterisks or dashes, so there's less chance of confusing the reader. |
| Report possible abuse to a moderator |
|
|
