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Review(s): 12
| Reviewer: Emelye | Date: 2007-06-30 |
| Reviewid: 148394 | Chapter: 1 |
| Oh I really enjoyed this very much. You write a great Hermione! I hope you do the full out Ron/Hermione fic, like we talked about. I think I'd really love it. You've captured her thought process so well, and her characterization is right on. Really really good. |
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| Reviewer: KateHC2 | Date: 2006-10-31 |
| Reviewid: 146022 | Chapter: 1 |
Oh, well done Dogstar! You expressed so much with the little task of "reading over" Ron's homework. Your Hermione is just as I picture her-quite uneven in the various aspects of her personality. And, of course, I loved the flashback to her Mum. And the end.
Grandma Kate |
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| Reviewer: StephanieV | Date: 2006-03-12 |
| Reviewid: 140855 | Chapter: 1 |
| You do such a great job of staying within the characters' true nature. I love these additional scenes and further insights into their thoughts. |
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| Reviewer: Seaspray | Date: 2006-02-26 |
| Reviewid: 140295 | Chapter: 1 |
This is just wonderful - perfect characterisation of Hermione. I loved her coming to the realisation that she wasn't going to change him into her ideal boy, and have him studying every evening in the library - but that he was truly amazing anyway - if, occassionally, rather a prat. And I liked the little spelling mistakes you interspersed her train of thought with - so funny. I remember someone saying those pens were rather like the spell checker on Microsoft Word :) - this reminded me of that. I liked Hermione's flashback to her being comforted by her mother. I never thought of it but it must have been incredibly difficult to have Lavender sharing a dormitory with her. My favourite part was the end, though:
<Hermione tapped the last word on Ron’s essay and handed it to him. “There,” she said, meaning, “I love you, too.” >
Very true to Hermione's way of showing affection - and to the whole R/Hr relationship. Awesome, as always. *polishes DWMWN badge proudly* *adjusts crown* |
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| Reviewer: FordPrefect | Date: 2006-02-26 |
| Reviewid: 140288 | Chapter: 1 |
| Nicely done. Sometimes it amazes me that clever authors can take a snippet of canon and build a little vignette out of it. I am especially impressed when someone does it and it seems fresh and original and makes me think, "I never imagined it like that." |
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| Reviewer: AmandaB | Date: 2006-02-26 |
| Reviewid: 140282 | Chapter: 1 |
| I love the unspoken communication between Ron and Hermione, especially the last line. That explains why she corrects so many of Ron's essays, out of affection and caring! I also liked that you pointed out that Ron sticks up for his friends, and that is the main reason Hermione loves him, despite his faults. |
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| Reviewer: MissDaisy | Date: 2006-02-25 |
| Reviewid: 140266 | Chapter: 1 |
I love, love, love the last line of this! (And anyone who knows me can tell you this is high praise coming from me ~ I'm a fan of last lines.)
Of course, a good last line can't stand on it's own and your doesn't...this whole piece is very charming, simply written (in the good way) and nicely in-character.
Really nicely done. Thanks for sharing this. |
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| Reviewer: Mullvaney | Date: 2006-02-25 |
| Reviewid: 140263 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is really good, Dogstar! Your charecterization of Hermione's mother was great. Also, this is a priceless look inside Hermione's head! ' “There,” she said, meaning, “I love you, too.” ' Yay! |
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