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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 7

Reviewer: dogstarDate: 2006-04-30
Reviewid: 142405Chapter: 1
Zia, I really enjoyed this portrayal of Lily's uncomfortable home life. I thought your portrayal of Petunia's narrow-minded hysteria and manipulation of her parents extremely interesting. I really liked the way you managed to interweave the action, spoken dialogue and Lily's interior thoughts so skilfully. Very nice work indeed!

Reviewer: Reader 2Date: 2006-04-18
Reviewid: 142027Chapter: 1
Quite nice. Thanks.

Reviewer: StarseaDate: 2006-04-17
Reviewid: 142008Chapter: 1
Oh, I do like this. You capture how difficult life must have been with Petunia but you don't make Lily a saint. It wouldn't surprise me if she did act up just to get her own back; I'm an older sister myself, so I have seen it happen!

Hope to read more from you soon!

xxx~Starsea~xxx

Reviewer: ReesieDate: 2006-04-17
Reviewid: 141999Chapter: 1
I really enjoyed your story - very well written and a great scenario for the reasons behind Petunia's horror and disdain surrounding magic.

I also liked the mention of James: "Even James Potter had witnessed that incident, raising an eyebrow questioningly at her in an inquiry she chose to ignore." I thought it was very well-characterized.

Reviewer: AmandaBDate: 2006-04-16
Reviewid: 141977Chapter: 1
I do think that Petunia's dislike of Lily would have stemmed from their childhood, and Petunia's jealously that she was unable to do things that Lily could. I like how you depict the fighting and pettiness of their relationship. I especially loved how wary Petunia is about things magical.

Reviewer: shiikiDate: 2006-04-16
Reviewid: 141970Chapter: 1
Very interesting; you've offered a great deal of insight into Lily's thoughts and feelings, and the backstory to her and Petunia's relationship. But the ending leaves me curious for what's going to happen next! *hint hint* :D

Reviewer: St. MargaretsDate: 2006-04-16
Reviewid: 141951Chapter: 1
You're here at the Quill, congratulations! Am I a total geek for knowing that your title refered to Lily?

I felt bad for her wand *shudder* you don't soak a wooden spoon either. :) It's interesting that you chose to place Petunia firmly in the kitchen - just as she is always there in Privet Drive. I also got a Harry/Dudley vibe from this as well - with Lily taking the Harry part. I don't know why, but I've always thought Harry was more like his mother in personality and his father in looks. You've really captured that here.

It's a sad little story, really - how Petunia and Lily drifted apart and how they are staying apart - inch by inch, moment by moment. No big dramatics - just the little things making more and more barriers.

I really liked Lily's first magic at the Nutcracker ballet. That was a beautiful description.

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