|
| Dumbledore's
Army |
|
|
|
Review(s): 7
| Reviewer: dogstar | Date: 2006-04-30 |
| Reviewid: 142405 | Chapter: 1 |
| Zia, I really enjoyed this portrayal of Lily's uncomfortable home life. I thought your portrayal of Petunia's narrow-minded hysteria and manipulation of her parents extremely interesting. I really liked the way you managed to interweave the action, spoken dialogue and Lily's interior thoughts so skilfully. Very nice work indeed! |
| Report possible abuse to a moderator |
| Reviewer: Starsea | Date: 2006-04-17 |
| Reviewid: 142008 | Chapter: 1 |
Oh, I do like this. You capture how difficult life must have been with Petunia but you don't make Lily a saint. It wouldn't surprise me if she did act up just to get her own back; I'm an older sister myself, so I have seen it happen!
Hope to read more from you soon!
xxx~Starsea~xxx |
| Report possible abuse to a moderator |
| Reviewer: Reesie | Date: 2006-04-17 |
| Reviewid: 141999 | Chapter: 1 |
I really enjoyed your story - very well written and a great scenario for the reasons behind Petunia's horror and disdain surrounding magic.
I also liked the mention of James: "Even James Potter had witnessed that incident, raising an eyebrow questioningly at her in an inquiry she chose to ignore." I thought it was very well-characterized. |
| Report possible abuse to a moderator |
| Reviewer: AmandaB | Date: 2006-04-16 |
| Reviewid: 141977 | Chapter: 1 |
| I do think that Petunia's dislike of Lily would have stemmed from their childhood, and Petunia's jealously that she was unable to do things that Lily could. I like how you depict the fighting and pettiness of their relationship. I especially loved how wary Petunia is about things magical. |
| Report possible abuse to a moderator |
| Reviewer: shiiki | Date: 2006-04-16 |
| Reviewid: 141970 | Chapter: 1 |
| Very interesting; you've offered a great deal of insight into Lily's thoughts and feelings, and the backstory to her and Petunia's relationship. But the ending leaves me curious for what's going to happen next! *hint hint* :D |
| Report possible abuse to a moderator |
| Reviewer: St. Margarets | Date: 2006-04-16 |
| Reviewid: 141951 | Chapter: 1 |
You're here at the Quill, congratulations! Am I a total geek for knowing that your title refered to Lily?
I felt bad for her wand *shudder* you don't soak a wooden spoon either. :) It's interesting that you chose to place Petunia firmly in the kitchen - just as she is always there in Privet Drive. I also got a Harry/Dudley vibe from this as well - with Lily taking the Harry part. I don't know why, but I've always thought Harry was more like his mother in personality and his father in looks. You've really captured that here.
It's a sad little story, really - how Petunia and Lily drifted apart and how they are staying apart - inch by inch, moment by moment. No big dramatics - just the little things making more and more barriers.
I really liked Lily's first magic at the Nutcracker ballet. That was a beautiful description. |
| Report possible abuse to a moderator |
|
|
