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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: Tears
Review(s): 3

Reviewer: Madame V. HunterDate: 2006-05-13
Reviewid: 142765Chapter: 1
I've never read a Mrytle fiction before--I liked this one and am intrigue by the Richard Lupin Chararcter. Are we going to see him again?

Reviewer: Reader 2Date: 2006-05-13
Reviewid: 142762Chapter: 1
If Ada Kensington and discord_harmony offered advice on how to improve or present this then I think you should have listened to them.

The story was difficult to enjoy owing to errors which included missing words, repeated words, repeated fragments, misspelled words, wrong tense, improper pronunciation, and spacing.

Reviewer: J ForiasDate: 2006-05-12
Reviewid: 142744Chapter: 1
This is a very good story. A good plot-line with good execution. You introduced a lot of original elements, especially the personal vow magic that condemned Myrtle to life as a ghost. It was a very thoughtful take on canon events.

My only criticism would be to keep an eye on spelling errors. They can sometimes distract a reader from the story.

Finally, I just wanted to congratulate you on your characterisation. I thought it was excellent, particularly your explanation of Minerva's character development and of course Myrtle. I think it was a fairly original take on Myrtle. I often see her portrayed as weak and pitiable, in stories about her schooldays, whereas I think she had a lot more fight in her in this portrayal, which I think is more consistent with canon. And it also makes for a much more enjoyable story!

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