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Review(s): 7
| Reviewer: Baron Von Krogg | Date: 2006-12-12 |
| Reviewid: 146430 | Chapter: 1 |
My goodness, What an enjoyable and a heartbreaking
read. When Harry's daughter finds out what her father
was really all about it really made her think.
Hopefully if there is a continuation of the story,
I hope that the full story is told. |
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| Reviewer: EricaVee | Date: 2006-06-22 |
| Reviewid: 143597 | Chapter: 1 |
| It's good, but I think it could be smoother in places. I also think that the article didn't really sound like it was from a newspaper, it was a bit too flowery and there were a few places where you changed tenses: "Sitting in the front two rows of chairs, those closest to the body, flowers, and pictures of a smiling Harry, WERE the Weasleys...", "Sitting between her mother and father and clutching a four-month-old baby girl IS the young woman..." Despite that, it's a very emotional fic. Congrats on your challenge win! |
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| Reviewer: LizzieAnn | Date: 2006-06-21 |
| Reviewid: 143563 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is a very good story, you did a great job. Your character description was dead on, and so were the motives of the characters. How Ginny kept all of Harry's things locked up till his daughter was ready, and the reactions of evrybody at the funeral. Really good job. |
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| Reviewer: starfisher | Date: 2006-06-20 |
| Reviewid: 143551 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is a great story and I love the plotline. The cliffhanger is a little weak, though...not offense intended! Please write more, I'd love to hear this story continued. |
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| Reviewer: Baron Von Krogg | Date: 2006-06-20 |
| Reviewid: 143541 | Chapter: 1 |
My Oh My, What a tear jerker. To have Harry's Daughter
read his obituatary,after his wife,Ginny had looked
at the paper first. Then to leave the room open so
that Elizabeth could see it. But the best set of lines
from Elizabeth were the lines, Please tell me about Dad.That makes the whole story really set in, Excellent. |
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