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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 5

Reviewer: SeasprayDate: 2006-09-21
Reviewid: 145442Chapter: 1
I really like this - the title especially made me laugh - very good use of the double meaning :) And I like the ambiguous POV - I *thought* it was Lavender - it certainly sounded like Lavender, but I wasn't quite sure until near the end. You actually made me feel quite sorry for the girl, because it seems she was crushing on Ron for a while, and because she sincerely seemed to think that winning him was a matter of being 'obvious' (I guess *that's* why she picked that sweetheart necklace, huh?).. and Ron is very lovable, in his goofy way. Aged seventeen, in a House with Ron, I would *totally* be a Lavender. You also captured how clueless Lavender is about the things that are really important to Ron, and the Trio in general, as shown in her dismissive remark about how pre-occupied with Harry Hermione was in GoF. Bless her for trying, but she really is not the girl for Ron. Nice insight, very cleverly written!

Reviewer: A_Wash1979Date: 2006-09-18
Reviewid: 145377Chapter: 1
I read your other reviews, and I'm glad to see that I wasn't the only one who intially read it as Hermione's POV. I also went back and reread it and it made more sense. Very insightful. I'm sure Hermione had some sleepless nights while Lavender was enjoying her Won-Won. So now she gets to experience some of the same turmoil that Hermione had to go through. This was an interesting approach, and I enjoyed it!

Reviewer: MadHatterLovesGinnyDate: 2006-09-17
Reviewid: 145366Chapter: 1
Ahhhhhhh! I read the author's note, and I had to read the story again. I hope you know htat this whole story is written in Hermione's POV with Lavender's POV written in the author's note. It's just confusing. But it's a good story, I liked it! Keep writing!

Reviewer: leiselilyDate: 2006-09-15
Reviewid: 145352Chapter: 1
Oh you got me! Had to go back and read it again. Very good.

Reviewer: perpetuallyconfusedDate: 2006-09-15
Reviewid: 145347Chapter: 1
Wow, you had me going there... I thought it was Hermione all the way until the line about Ron coming down the boys' stairs with Her. I was thinking that all the swearing was a bit OOC for Hermione, and I was confused by a couple of the other things, but you totally had me going. So then I went back and re-read it properly and it makes much more sense! I quite like it, really- keep up the good work!

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