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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: Dangerous Driving
Review(s): 4

Reviewer: mary ellisDate: 2007-04-20
Reviewid: 147809Chapter: 1
This had a nice balance of character exploration, humor, and intrigue. I love it whenever a writer highlights a lesser character of the Magicosm as you do here so very well. Ernie is very true to his origins. The spy story is well told for the most part, and his fears for his family are most poignant.

The little personal touches make this story special:
--the 'tradition' of asking the driver you're taking over for who was on his bus,
--the particular snippets of scenes of despair Ernie remembers when he encounters the Dementors,
--the other characters: brave Melanie, faithful Ethel, cold-hearted Robards, sad Cicely.

And the humor:

--the reaction of the Nelson's Column lion to Ernie's driving,
--Harper's "Good night, Speedy",
--Madam Marsh's motion sickness,
--the drivers' suspicion of the Unspeakables and disdain for their binges,
--Ernie's feelings about the Extendable Ears.

I have a little problem with the ending. It was a big surprise, but an unfair one I think, as you gave no hint at all that Ernie could be playing both ends of the spying game, and you, in fact, contradicted the possibility by having him so afraid of the DEs, and thinking the Dementors had been set on him because the MoM had arrested someone he had fingered. Wouldn't he consider himself to be protected somewhat if he was reporting to the DEs all this time? I'm a great fan of Agatha Christie, and whenever she played a trick like this, I always found that she had given some clue to it which I had missed or she had used some words which could be taken several differernt ways. That's the kind of mystery which is most satisfying. it wouldn't take much to fix this up, I don't think. And the story deserves to be told on other sites as well. (Wizard Tales has a section just for character sketches.)

Other than that, it made great, original reading!

Reviewer: Author by NightDate: 2006-09-20
Reviewid: 145429Chapter: 1
Wow. I love all of the backstory on Ernie - his children's deaths, his granddaughter... very good!

Reviewer: Reader 2Date: 2006-09-17
Reviewid: 145369Chapter: 1
A most excellent piece with a wonderful ending. Thanks.

Reviewer: Norwegian BlueDate: 2006-09-17
Reviewid: 145364Chapter: 1
I find it odd that that the first time I randomly reviewed a story on Checkmated (at least, I'm pretty sure it was checkmated, it might have been on an lj community), and the first time I get a second in a few weeks to read the new fic list on the SQ, and I see the very same story. I've already said that it is a very cool and unique story from a very unique perspective, and for now will only say that I am very glad that you are spreading this story around to share the uniqueness of it.

...Aaand, I just looked over at the checkmated review section and saw that you had replied to me. I wasn't disapointed with Ernie throwing his lot in with the ministry *or* with the DE's actually. It was the unenviable position of being stuck between a rock and a hard place, and at the point it would be hard to be frustrated and not just push back on both sides out of sheer annoyance...At least I think that's what I was thinking when I read it. Its been a few weeks, but in any case, that's what I'm thinking now. Er...I swear I'm not stalking you.

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