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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 5

Reviewer: Mcily NochiDate: 2007-03-09
Reviewid: 147420Chapter: 3
You know I love it. I'm exhausted from my interviews, otherwise I'd leave a better review - but then, you've heard all my reactions to your amazingness before. :)

Reviewer: AlkariDate: 2006-11-04
Reviewid: 146070Chapter: 2
An excellent story, and I like the way you have written the power-plays between the students, and the fact that Severus's first 'defence' is to try the physical. LOL at the differing reactions between Rodolphus and James to a physical threat, and at the "I think I'm Sirius Black" retort with all its implications.

I assume you started this well before the Black family tree was published though, as you have Bellatrix and Rodolphus in MWPP's year?

Reviewer: Mcily NochiDate: 2006-11-03
Reviewid: 146048Chapter: 2
Well, you did it. You've created a Severus Snape who tugs at my heartstrings and whose motivations I understand. I can see why you've been chanelling him so much recently, too - he reminds me of you.

My favorite line is Kirrian's bit about talking like he's being scored. Kind of reminds me of high school, when everyone thought I was a snob because I used the best word I knew to convey my thoughts in conversations.

I can't wait for the next chapter. This was exactly what I needed tonight!

Reviewer: Mcily NochiDate: 2006-09-30
Reviewid: 145561Chapter: 1
Wow. The last year of putting up with you while you channeled Snape was worth it! I don't have much constructive praise or criticism at this point, because that was only about a page long (grrr . . .) but I will when you post the next bit!

So. Draco and Snape. In the Forest, taking a second to breathe before the Dark Lord closes in again. What a fascinating beginning for the Snapefic. I can't wait to read more.

P.S. The punctuation is a little iffy, with apostrophes being turned into symbols. I don't know if there's much you can do to fix that, but I would recommend it.

Reviewer: Ada KensingtonDate: 2006-09-30
Reviewid: 145548Chapter: 1
Hooray! Another good Snape-fic - one with an excellent start, I might add. Interesting that you present Snape and Draco as grieving. Nice observation. I would suppose they're grieving for the their lost lives, their lost haven of relative peace, trust and acceptance in the form of their time at Hogwarts - the lives they willingly sacrificed that night on the Lightning-Struck Tower. In a way, like Dumbledore, they are also dead.

I particularly liked these lines:

"Dumbledore's plea was still ringing in his head, fresh material for a thousand nightmares. Severus hated him more in death than he'd ever managed in all their long, antagonistic aquaintance. He hated Dumbledore for doing this to him, for doing this to Draco, hated him for begging, hated him for dying."

and this one;

"Severus saw Dumbledore tumble over the parapet again . . . and again . . . and again . . . Severus . . . please . . ."

Great imagery. I can envision Severus turning over the events in his mind over and over again in this way.

Kudos to a great start. We need more Snape fics at the Quill. I'm looking forward to seeing how you'll depict Severus' childhood (not least due to the fact that it'll offer a different - and perhaps better - perspective on my own take =)).

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