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Review(s): 9
| Reviewer: Potioncat | Date: 2006-10-12 |
| Reviewid: 145695 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is absolutely delightful! The tone is perfect. You've done a very nice job of showing how a father watches his little girl grow up. Hermione seems very much in character. |
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| Reviewer: Author by Night | Date: 2006-10-11 |
| Reviewid: 145657 | Chapter: 1 |
Welcome back to the fandom. :) I've found nobody can truly leave - it's like joining the military.
Anyway, very good story! I like how you wrote Mr. Granger. We see him so rarely in canon. I thought it was great how you showed his love for Hermione, his very special daughter. :) |
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| Reviewer: Miss Gypsy | Date: 2006-10-10 |
| Reviewid: 145652 | Chapter: 1 |
Reader 2,
Thank you for the observation, but I did not intend for that to be referring to the night of the Potters' death. I considered changing it because it SEEMED like that's what I was talking about, but I figured that it would be alright.
But you've proven me wrong. So thanks, I probably should have had her refer to something less ambiguous. :)
Thanks to everyone for their reviews! |
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| Reviewer: shiiki | Date: 2006-10-10 |
| Reviewid: 145649 | Chapter: 1 |
| This was a really great look at Hermione over the years, and I liked the voice you gave her father - a little wistful, but proud all the same. Hermione as a little girl is just precious! |
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| Reviewer: Reader 2 | Date: 2006-10-10 |
| Reviewid: 145647 | Chapter: 1 |
Quite enjoyable – but with a big error.
The following makes Herminoe five years older than Ron or Harry:
“Daddy, guess what I learned in grammar school today!”
“There are owls, Daddy, swooping all over the country. Nobody knows why. Isn’t that woooooonderful?” |
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| Reviewer: Nundu | Date: 2006-10-10 |
| Reviewid: 145643 | Chapter: 1 |
As a mother that last year married off her first (How could she be old enough to marry? What happened to those 25 years?) I recognize that feeling of 'As I'll ever be.'
A lovely vignette to one of my favourite songs. |
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| Reviewer: Drezella Eleanor Winesap | Date: 2006-10-10 |
| Reviewid: 145641 | Chapter: 1 |
I. Love. This.
...I realize that isn't very constructive at all, so I'll add something:
I'm not so sure the lyrics are necessary. I understand why you chose to use them- it's a beautiful song- but I think the story can stand alone- it's almost *better* if it does. Since I know this song, I did hear it playing in my mind as I read, but in places I skipped over the written lyrics. Found them to be a nuisance. But that's just me. |
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