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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: ...Longest
Review(s): 6

Reviewer: Vega BlackDate: 2008-01-23
Reviewid: 150441Chapter: 1
I read this while investigating the Phoenix winners. I liked it. Short but everything that needed to be said was said. Perhaps concise is a better word than short.

Peter's behavior is made understandable.

Reviewer: Rachael DuBoisDate: 2007-03-19
Reviewid: 147530Chapter: 1
I really, really like this. I especially love the part about how everyone suspects everyone else. You use such simple language, but the fear and suspicion are so clear. This is a lovely piece, and I think you've captured the characters completely, even in so few words.

Reviewer: shimotsukiDate: 2007-03-16
Reviewid: 147498Chapter: 1
Wow -- you do an excellent job painting a chilling image in just a few words. I think your take on Peter here is very perceptive. Wanting to be appreciated and respected, when you feel that you haven't been, is an extremely strong motivation...maybe even strong enough to make you betray the people you thought were your friends.

Reviewer: J ForiasDate: 2007-03-14
Reviewid: 147473Chapter: 1
I read things too quickly. It took me a very long time to realise what the first paragraph was about. It's a very neat idea.

I like Remus' silent awe. He's touched that Peter has managed this incredible feat for him. I doubt he laughs later.

But it's quite a unique perception of Peter. He *wants* to betray them. He truly is transformed. Normally we see it just as cowardice. Wanting to be protected, but not really enjoying the betrayal itself.

Do you know, I think I like it this way. Nice piece!

Reviewer: InFabulaDate: 2007-03-14
Reviewid: 147468Chapter: 1
Hi, Megan.

Thank you for reviewing. I'm glad you liked my story, short though it is. :-)

The title comes from the saying "He who laughs last, laughs longest" - though I agree, it is ironic that the story is only about 140 words!

As for the Phoenix Rises competition and its rules, I was inspired to write on the subject of transformation which I hope was explained at the end.

Reviewer: meganDate: 2007-03-13
Reviewid: 147461Chapter: 1
I like brevity that still manages to convey a message. But I didn't get the title (unless you were making a tongue in cheek comment about the form, rather than substance, of your story...). And though I don't know the exact rules of this contest, wasn't a phoenix moment supposed to be about loyalty, or renewal of hope, or some such? Or perhaps you wanted your story to be the opposite of every phoenix trait, just as its title is a contradiction to its length? :-)

At any rate, I liked it.

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