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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 3

Reviewer: Violet AzureDate: 2007-08-17
Reviewid: 148905Chapter: 1
[Red and gold, black and white, Potter and company appear to live in the simplified world of a child’s colouring-in book. Subtlety and grey shades are the strengths of Slytherin house]

Nice, tight writing here. You sum up the philosophies of Gryffindor and Slytherin quite well and paint a vivid picture with just a few brush strokes.

[Snape wonders what the Dark Lord could want with such moronic followers.]

You know, I was wondering the same thing myself. :)

[It is plain that he shows more interest in her than in any of the other candidates, but the girl is really just a Black: cunning enough, but much too haughty and self-absorbed, too sure of her own pure-blooded wonderfulness to notice her all-too-obvious failings. Eagerly she now presents her mind to the Dark Lord, as if expecting an ‘O’ grade and a gold star for her efforts at Being A Good Little Death Eater.]

I really like Snape's take on Bellatrix. You can really hear his sharp, yet sarcastic, mind at work. His painting of Bellatrix as a fawning Voldemort fangirl is quite accurate as is his reduction of her fevor for "the cause" down to her being a good girl who wants a gold star.

[Are Death Eaters the ones who eat the death that’s meant for their Dark Lord, so he can escape? But such thoughts are silly. They are all going to triumph, and no one is going to die, no one that doesn’t deserve it.]

Very sad, the foreshadowing about death. I also like how you have Snape question Voldemort and the meaning of the DEs. I like how those doubts creep in, yet he is still able to justify them.

[He can feel the Dark Lord probing and stabbing and sniffing at the memories, stripping away the mask and cloak, stripping away the Half-Blood Prince, leaving only Severus Tobias Snape quite naked and shivering.]

I like that describtion of Legillamency--it's quite terrifying and you really get this sense of invasion, this sense that you're tryingto run and hide from something terrifying.

Awesome one shot. I love Snape and I love it when authors capture his complex psyche.

Reviewer: meganDate: 2007-08-06
Reviewid: 148699Chapter: 1
Great structuring of this story. Although you're switching from Snape's memories to Snape's present thoughts, it's always clear which is which, and the transitions feel quite natural. I also like the idea of the story. It's a little explored issue in fandom. I was actually quite curious what was going on through Snape's mind in the first chapter of DH, when Voldemort fixed his eyes on him. Clearly Snape was hoodwinking him to some extent, as he didn't let on about the 7 Potters part. I'd be quite interested to see your take on that episode, as well.

Reviewer: mullvaneyDate: 2007-08-06
Reviewid: 148696Chapter: 1
I love the psychological aspect of this, it takes place entirely inside Snape's head. I like the way you showed how Voldemort effortlessly drew what he needed from Snape's mind, despite his efforts to control what Voldy sees. Very subtle, nicely done!

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