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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 5

Reviewer: AllyLovesHPDate: 2007-09-06
Reviewid: 149180Chapter: 1
Wow, I have tears in my eyes! I liked your take on how everyone meets up in the afterlife, it's comforting to know that all friends and family are reunited and put to peace.

Reviewer: McGonagall's CatDate: 2007-09-03
Reviewid: 149144Chapter: 1
An excellent piece!

A couple choices of phrasing to quibble over:
"...him fall, limp, onto the crumbled ground" - They are inside the castle, so wouldn't it be more accurate to say "floor" ranther than "ground"? And, "crumbled ground" bothers my "ear". "Debris littered" or something along those lines seems better to me.
"...which James, Lily and Sirius had disappeared through minutes before." Tonks and Ted weren't there long enough for "minutes" to be the best choice. "Moments" would though.
"...James Potter, Lily Potter and Sirius Black..." That "ear" tweaks again at this. Using "Potter" twice is ponderous. It would work better as "James and Lily Potter".


It felt nice that you had the characters come to a pleasant resolution. Good job!
I'm looking forward to your next one!
Thank you.

Reviewer: ChocaholicDate: 2007-09-01
Reviewid: 149131Chapter: 1
This is how I read fanfics these days - with a box of kleenex in one hand. Wonderful, heartbreaking missing moment. Thanks for writing.

Reviewer: Author by NightDate: 2007-09-01
Reviewid: 149128Chapter: 1
I read this first on LJ... but I think you changed a few things since then. I also like this version... and once again, it reduced me to tears.

Reviewer: philotic_netDate: 2007-09-01
Reviewid: 149124Chapter: 1
Interesting and enjoyable. I like reading these after death stories. I like that JKR established this whole, going back to a place from your life thing. It is so comforting to think about being reunited with all the loved ones you have lost after death. Its happy that Remus and Tonks can be together for good now. (Seriously though, I still cant believe she killed them both! It seemed irresponsible for Tonks to leave the baby if there was a chance he would be orphaned. They are seriously the dumbest pair of parents ever)oh well, what are you going to do? I liked your story and I will always love Remus and Tonks. Keep up the good writing. :)

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