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Reviews for: Choices
Review(s): 5

Reviewer: HelenHDate: 2007-10-18
Reviewid: 149665Chapter: 2
This is a great conclusion to the story - I love that you did not give Remus an easy way back to Tonks.

I did not believe that Harry had it right when he accused Lupin of wanting to 'have an adventure' when he offered to join the trio on their mission. I think Remus's reasons were more noble and more genuine than that, though he *was* also using 'helping Harry' as an excuse to dodge more weighty responsibilities closer to home. So, I like it that you 'paid him back', I guess, with an 'adventure', and he got a chance to help Harry, even if it was remotely, and without Harry even knowing. So much angst for Remus! I love how, in telling this story, you have expanded the readers' experience of the war, and given us another view of the front line, so to speak. It was very dramatic, very frightening. And I like how you hint to us that Snape 'facilitates' Remus's escape though, from Remus p.o.v. he does not realise this, and never makes the connection.

However, though the epilogue rounds this story off neatly, I'd really like to see you continue it from their reunion, with Remus facing Ted and Andromeda, earning their good opinion, and then the Tonks family's separation, as Ted goes on the run. Then Remus's work with the Weasleys and Lee Jordan for PotterWatch. And more Kingsley. I really like your Kingsley. :)
Anyway, good luck with that! I look forward to seeing it soon;)
Helen x

Reviewer: Poppy PDate: 2007-10-18
Reviewid: 149660Chapter: 2
That was really lovely. I can't believe this story hasn't gotten more reviews. It's beautifully written and it has some wonderful Remus insight. I was particularly happy to see Snape. When you think about it, his whole year must have been a series of tough choices just like this one. I loved when he outsmarted Bellatrix and Greyback. Poor Dora, all that anxiety during what should've been the happiest time in her life. I guess we have to be grateful that JKR at least let Remus experience having a son, even though it was such a short time. Great job on this.

Reviewer: HelenHDate: 2007-10-14
Reviewid: 149627Chapter: 1
You've got me thinking, jncarlin, about the RL/NT timeline...

I always had in my head that the main reason why Remus looked strained at the wedding was that he and Dora already knew she was expecting (JKR's hint is Harry's observation of her looking 'radiant', a word often used to describe pregnant women!), but I like your interpretation of the sequence of events very much. I'd forgotten about the questioning - and abuse - that Tonks and Lupin had to endure after the wedding was crashed, and how this would have reinforced Lupin's feelings that he'd done Tonks an enormous wrong in marrying her. I like that you have only then had them discover her pregnancy, so that instead of leaving Tonks with her parents after a massive row, the main points of which being the ones he makes to Harry (about the child being infected with his disease, about her parents being disgusted with their marriage, and about how he feels he should never have married her) the first time he admits these things out loud is with Harry... I like that, I think, because, as we all know, Remus was being utterly irrational in these thoughts; usually, when a normally-rational person loses their head, they realise they are doing so *as* they verbalise their irrational thoughts for the first time, so it makes better sense that Remus is saying these things for the *first* time rather than repeating an earlier argument he has had with Tonks. Good psychology, jncarlin! Remus's loss of temper with Harry is even more understandable in this context, as all the embarrassment and humiliation he experiences as he realises he's losing his grip might well provoke such a reaction. And when he has a chance to calm down, and examine his behaviour, his thoughts, his reaction to Harry, his treatment of Dora, he will feel a total prat. This fits so perfectly with the character and with the storyline, so I really like what you've done here. And I really like that you got me thinking about Lupin's story during DH in a different way to the one I had imagined.
Thank you. x

Reviewer: Vega BlackDate: 2007-10-12
Reviewid: 149595Chapter: 1
I like the way you imagined the whole range of experiences that brought Remus to the point that he would abandon Tonx and go to aid Harry. The events are compatible with everything we know in canon, but are fully fleshed out and completely yours. You succeed in giving us a sympathetic view of why Remus would leave his wife behind, yet you never violate what is written in canon. I respect that.

Reviewer: Poppy PDate: 2007-10-10
Reviewid: 149576Chapter: 1
That was beautifully written. You made Remus' pain and self doubt so real. I loved your descriptions of how he sees Dora...*sigh* so romantic! I also liked the recurring theme of "what have I done?" The interrogation at the Burrow was so chilling! You made me really, really hate Dawlish. This whole piece just made me want to give Remus a hug. But of course I can't 'cause darn JKR killed him (well that and he's a fictional character). Lovely chapter--I can't wait to read more. :)

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