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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: The Proxy
Review(s): 9

Reviewer: scottykarrdeDate: 2007-12-26
Reviewid: 150216Chapter: 1
absolutely brilliant. Feelingly written and a pleasure to enjoy!
ONe quibble - Edward Remus Lupin? Wasn't it...goodness, Ted? Theodore? the mind fails me. Must check what Remus tells Shell Cottage again.
Otherwise - more, more, more!

Reviewer: smokeyDate: 2007-12-22
Reviewid: 150190Chapter: 1
I always enjoy young Teddy stories

Reviewer: Vega BlackDate: 2007-12-13
Reviewid: 150145Chapter: 1
I like the interaction between Draco and Andromeda. I think Draco is a very confused person at this point in his life and Narcissa may want to have some relationship with her only living family member. Whether Andromeda can forgive her is one story but I think she could forgive Draco. Iliked the warm feeling she has when he calls her aunt.

Reviewer: ileneDate: 2007-12-10
Reviewid: 150123Chapter: 1
Not sure if authors are supposed to leave comments here, but I really wanted to clarify Teddy's age, which I suppose I should have specified in the text. I meant him to be around 6 months old when Draco first comes to visit, but when HRH visit him and find him imitating Draco it is actually 3 months after that. That makes Teddy around 9 months old, which is around the time babies do indeed start to combine sounds to make words (I actually looked up sources on childhood development on that one).

Reviewer: Lorelei LynnDate: 2007-12-09
Reviewid: 150121Chapter: 1
Very interesting (and original) setup for the plot - the interaction between Andromeda and Draco is well done. Looking forward to updates...

Reviewer: aggie918Date: 2007-12-05
Reviewid: 150094Chapter: 1
I really like this! I think it's very plausible that Draco would act this way. (Given what JKR has said in interviews about him trying to help Harry and becoming an improved person - but still no angel.) What really makes it work is the idea that Cissy is the one who is pulling the strings.

From the passage of time in the story, it seems like Teddy would be about five or six months old. (If the story starts in June, from the mention of Draco's b-day, and with Ted's b-day being sometime in April from what we can guess from canon.) That is *a little* early for him to be talking as much as he is but not especially so. Babies start talking like that around six months or so. Though if you want to be on the safe side you can always make Teddy a wee bit older.

Anyway, this is a great story! Can't wait for the part two!

Reviewer: Author By NightDate: 2007-12-05
Reviewid: 150093Chapter: 1
Nice to see you delving into fic again. :) Very good one - I really like how it takes a while for Andromeda to warm up. I always felt so horrible for her that her own sister killed her child...

Reviewer: tykoDate: 2007-12-05
Reviewid: 150092Chapter: 1
As much as I like post-DH fiction, and stuff about the Blacks/Malfoys, this just seems a little... flat. I feel like Draco's never really developed, and he comes across as a little too..um...repentant. Andromeda is well-written, though, which I like. But I think maybe Teddy's getting a little too much credit. He may be a smart baby, but he's already talking? And imitating facial expressions? Though these are popular moves in fanfics, I just don't think he's old enough to pull that off here. Also... two picky things: I feel strongly that Teddy's real first name is really just Teddy, not Edward or Ted or anything..but that could just be my preference. And why would Draco's lack of a wand stop him from Apparating to Andromeda's, if his mother had told him where the house was? "How did you get here without a wand?" seems a rather nonsensical question; magical transport isn't usually dependent on wands.

Reviewer: LesleyDate: 2007-12-04
Reviewid: 150085Chapter: 1
Oh, this is good! Altho I think she is being too soft on Draco, particularly about the "cub" comment. What a "howling" insult. (Please forgive me, that just popped out).

I hope we get to read more of this "tail" soon. (sorry, that one too) Waiting with baited breath..............................

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