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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 7

Reviewer: McGonagall's CatDate: 2008-01-25
Reviewid: 150457Chapter: 1
I just LOVE Neville stories and this was so spot on! There HAD to be scenes like this at their house.

Excelent!


Thank you!

Reviewer: whizbeeDate: 2008-01-06
Reviewid: 150339Chapter: 1
Wow. I'm sorry I didn't get to this sooner because it's a gem. There were so many little things I loved about it. Neville's sweet disposition, his "muggle" way of thinking, his desire to please and appease the adults around him. Perfectly characterized, which is difficult to do when you're working backwards and making him younger than we ever know him in the books.

I also really liked how you wrote about Neville's maternal grandparents. We hear so much about the Longbottom family you almost forget there's another set of grandparents involved! I loved Trevor, and I think he poses a very refreshing contrast to Augusta's sternness and overbearing attitudes, and really makes you wonder how Neville would have turned out if his granddad could have cared for him.

Last thing: what Trevor said about "I remember the old ways" or something like that--I thought that was a nice touch, a great allusion to changing attitudes about magic and those who have it and those who don't.

Wonderful job, I look forward to reading more of work!

Reviewer: reesieDate: 2007-12-22
Reviewid: 150191Chapter: 1
Loved your story. The writing technique is down pat, allowing the reader just to relax into the content. Gives a great look at why Neville is the way he is when we first see him. Just as importantly, I love the added insight on the divide between the Wizard and Muggle worlds. Very good.

Reviewer: smokeyDate: 2007-12-22
Reviewid: 150188Chapter: 1
a real heartbreaker

Reviewer: Author By NightDate: 2007-12-16
Reviewid: 150162Chapter: 1
Wow. What an amazing fanfic.

I love Trevor Longbottom; he loves Neville, but doubts his ability to care for him. And I love Neville's closing thoughts.

Reviewer: RugiDate: 2007-12-12
Reviewid: 150134Chapter: 1
I really love this story/vignette. What particularly touched me was the way you showed the intricate and confusing way families deal with eachother - how they can intimately understand each other and NOT understand each other at the same time. I thought it was interesting to see Trevor facing the idea that his grandson needs protection he can't provide from people he doesn't trust entirely but has to. I love that Augusta ALSO disapproved of what Algie did (hence the screaming fight) but closed ranks against Trevor because Algie was her brother (and maybe for her prides sake...) I love that Neville sees more than the adults suspect but also sees it in a child-like way.

It was also nice to see Trevor in Neville's life (I love that his name is Trevor) - it was good to see the different type of love Neville has in his family and how it would affect him and make him the boy/man he is later in the books. It made the story bittersweet in all of the best ways.

Reviewer: Madame V. HunterDate: 2007-12-11
Reviewid: 150133Chapter: 1
Well, I'm wiping away the tears. Big families and their different ways. I know those fears and my co-grandparents possibly feel the same way. Very moving and wise story. I wish there was more of it.

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