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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 7

Reviewer: elocindancerDate: 2009-07-11
Reviewid: 151429Chapter: 1
This is really good, really interesting to read about Hermione's changing her parents memories and all that. I would bring up a couple things, namely the chosen spells. This is not criticism, mind you, just the musings of a fan, wondering if a stupifying charm and a confundus charm were the best ones to choose. The reason I say this is because most of the stupify charms we see in the books involve the person locked, unable to move or speak, but on the whole fully aware of their surroundings. Now I cannot be sure what the effect of a stupifying charm on a sleeping person would be, but I did wonder. We also learn in the 2nd and 4th books about how to modify people's memories (Gilderoy Lockhart and Mr. Roberts teach us), generally by using 'Obliviate'. I just wondered at the choice of 'Confundo', since book 6 portrays it more as a physical blundering type of charm. Other than that I really liked it!! Excellent work again!

Reviewer: SongbirdDate: 2008-11-09
Reviewid: 151217Chapter: 1
Such a great story. Really heartbreaking and clever, and so Hermione- it fills up the gaps in DH extremely well. I really enjoyed it- and felt terribly for poor Hermione. What a terrible responsibility, and she's so young, too.

Reviewer: vega blackDate: 2008-03-06
Reviewid: 150600Chapter: 1
I read this almost as soon as it was posted but I was unable to write a review, because I was so upset by it. This was a very real depiction of Hermione's attempt to protect her parents. It is very hard to watch parents lose even the memory of their child. You went through the steps very carefully. Hermione is well described. She is very ruthless in order to protect them. I felt for parents having a child who is so much more powerful than they are.
"“Wendell.” Even though her mother’s exasperated tone was familiar, the false name was not. Hermione felt a more bitter homesickness than she had ever experienced at Hogwarts. Her parents were right in the next room but already, it felt as if they were separated by an ocean." This was a very well done moment. We see how horrible this all is for Hermione.

Reviewer: SnorkackCatcherDate: 2008-02-29
Reviewid: 150578Chapter: 1
Very nice indeed. I had wondered what sort of preparation Hermione would have needed to do, and that was a very plausible and well-charcaterised take on it.

Reviewer: NunduDate: 2008-02-25
Reviewid: 150565Chapter: 1
Oh, this just made my heart ache. Very well done.

Reviewer: Violet AzureDate: 2008-02-24
Reviewid: 150556Chapter: 1
This is a great companion piece to "Ron's Preparations." The contrast between the two is really amazing. With Ron's story, the support and love of his family helps him make his decision whereas you really convey this sense of Hermione being alone when she sets up her plans. When I read that line in the book about Hermione's parents being called Wendell and Monica Wilkins and that they didn't have a daughter and now wanted to tour Australia, that line really hit me hard and I've always wondered how Hermione pulled it off and what strength and courage it must have taken for her to orchestrate something like this. You do an amazing job of conveying Hermione's bravery and strong will along with the sadness she's feeling as she says good-bye to her parents. This is an amazing story and I'm looking forward to more missing moments. Some of my favorite parts of the story:

[The smile on her father’s face looked a bit forced as he continued. “Well, that’s – that’s wonderful. I say, then, I won’t need to teach you how to drive now, will I! Good thing too, the way people can be on the roads these days.”]

I like how you illustrate how Hermione's growing up experience is so different than a typical teenager and how it's not just Hermione missing out on those parent-child moments, but her mother and father as well.

[And if I die, they’ll be better off not remembering me anyway. A deep breath. This is the sensible thing to do…]

This just breaks my heart that Hermione is logically, and carefully staring down her own death and dealing with it. It just gave me the chills.

All the details you describe Hermione doing are really well thought-out. Everything from transfering money to arranging for fake passports to closing up the dental business was handled so well. I liked how you captured Hermione's...ruthless side. That when the chips are down, she can turn off her emotions and plan with the best of them and then fall apart later.

[Then Hermione combed the house, removing any framed photographs on the walls that had her in it and putting them in the bag, where they too landed with an echoing thud.]

This part was really sad, all the memories of her life with her parents just being packed away like that.

I hope you write a sequel where Hermione goes to Australia to find her parents and bring them home.

Reviewer: stubefiedDate: 2008-02-23
Reviewid: 150551Chapter: 1
Congrats: besides thinking of all the details both practical and emotional just like Hermione would, you've managed to make me start crying, stop, and start again three times over, and I've only read this once.

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