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Review(s): 5
| Reviewer: twirlingecho | Date: 2008-09-02 |
| Reviewid: 151072 | Chapter: 1 |
| That was really lovely. You did a great job making me feel what Ron was feeling... I welled up a couple of times. I loved his frustration at having to hide things from Bill and from everyone, and his relief that he didn't have to hide anything from Hermione. |
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| Reviewer: Poppy P | Date: 2008-08-27 |
| Reviewid: 151060 | Chapter: 1 |
| That was well written. A nice insight on Ron's thoughts during this scene. I like how you portrayed his frustration at not being able to share with Bill. Good job! |
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| Reviewer: Green Butterfly | Date: 2008-08-24 |
| Reviewid: 151033 | Chapter: 1 |
| You've done a great job showing Ron's POV, in a way we can hardly expect to be explored in canon. He's wonderfully sensitive yet straightforward, and it's very touching the way he's completely focussed on Hermione at the beginning. I also loved the description of the sunrise, and the way we get a good glimpse of the other characters -- the Bill/Fleur interaction, Luna, Harry. Good work! |
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| Reviewer: ladytalksalot17 | Date: 2008-08-23 |
| Reviewid: 151030 | Chapter: 1 |
| Amazing. So well written and well thought out, I loved the motivation behind the characters. Well done. |
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| Reviewer: KateHC2 | Date: 2008-08-23 |
| Reviewid: 151021 | Chapter: 1 |
Excellent! You've captured Ron very well. He's had to mature with all he has been through. I loved this imagery-
'Pupils meet and a stormy sky blue crashes with her cloudy, earthy brown. But the longer they hold each other’s gaze, it seems, the more the colours clear up, and the two essential elements in nature become harmonious.'
Grandma Kate |
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